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haven't posted anything in awhile, heres a verse i wrote a lil while back

I sit in time intertwined with the kinda bitter trife
decision like is this life? i symbolize a sickened mind
driven kinda split inside from stupid shit i did in life
sympathize with women like i wish i didn't but i did it
like i wish it was different but it isn't cause its like i did it
just to do it its like i had to get this fucking stupid
just to listen to the blueprint i had written but i mute this
voice in my mind like telling me i should listen but i blew it
now somethings missing and i knew it should've been
different but i'm threw it so i'm hear just wishing to get threw it
sipping and i'm moving to slow my head is spinning its confusing
can't get uplifted cause its rooted deep up in my inner peace again
i try to say peace but then the beast within just kinda creeps up in
unleashes and i know i'll probably never get to sleep again
stressing shit i'll never get to see again confessing its my evil twin
but i look in the mirror and its me again, it seems these sins'll
never let me find a peace within this struggle so i hustle
but its a jungle when you puzzled cause you running
from those who love you cause something always bugs you
and you look in the mirror like the only one you running from
is just you.

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/im-so ... t6321.html

It's been a looooooong time coming.
Niggaz were waiting for The Don's return.
Took long enough.
But dope ass shit...I've always had an appreciation for the deep inner struggle-type shit.
Illest needs more of that to bring it back to where in once stood.
Now that ur droppin again...don't stop. We need more of this to keep the site hot.

can't get uplifted cause its rooted deep up in my inner peace again
i try to say peace but then the beast within just kinda creeps up in
unleashes and i know i'll probably never get to sleep again
stressing shit i'll never get to see again confessing its my evil twin

^^ really stood out ta me

dope ass piece dj havent read too much from you since i been here

but would definitely read more

good looks

upping over the crackers and wack shit

Good to see you drop, but eh

sympathize with women like i wish i didn't but i did it
like i wish it was different but it isn't cause its like i did it
just to do it its like i had to get this fucking stupid
just to listen to the blueprint i had written but i mute this
voice in my mind like telling me i should listen but i blew it
now somethings missing and i knew it should've been
different but i'm threw it so i'm hear just wishing to get threw it
sipping and i'm moving to slow my head is spinning its confusing
can't get uplifted cause its rooted deep up in my inner peace again
i try to say peace but then the beast within just kinda creeps up in

^^ .. Straight Sick ..
Tha Flow Was So Smooth & Nice On This Verse ..
But Those Bars Was Hella Killa Though ..
Tha Endin` Was a Good Way to Wrap it Up ..
Basically another Sick Drop ..

True

Yeah, def a hot piece right here, only one thing - it just seemed a bit repetitive to me, donno if that was really the point or not, it just stood out to me.. not used to see u drop writtens like this, but def worth the read.. just a dope piece.. keep it up!