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Just a lil song i've been puttin together.. hope ya'll like it.. it isn't finished tho..there's more to come..

let's go back to before u cracked your first jaw
when u lacked em bars, when u still jacked em cars
u were chased by the law and your mother threw you out
what we knew about friendship arised to the surface
u felt worthless, u were the mud gettin trambled upon
but u're also the example of a guy who gambled and won
u started puttin the pen to the paper in an early age
conserved your rage to unleash it upon page after page
a slinkin threath arised from your ink and sweat
we drink to your death, sit down and raise your glasses
it's time to save our breath and let the music speak for the masses
cheers...

Chorus x2
in your memory, we drink
in your memory, we sing
in your memory, we toast, everybody from coast to coast

in your memory, we write
in your memory, we fight
in your memory, we stand together here tonight

I'll take this crowd to u and make u proud!
make em sing your name out loud, hear em shoud
remember how we called each other up in the mornin
and talked all day long about who we fucked last night
used to laugh at mistakes and tell good stories
remember em hood orgies? all the failures and glories
damn, i'm cryin, can u get that tissue for me?
cause no matter what happenes I'll always miss u homie!

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dont need the links nemore^..

u felt worthless, u were the mud gettin trambled upon
but u're also the example of a guy who gambled and won
u started puttin the pen to the paper in an early age
conserved your rage to unleash it upon page after page

my fav part^..ur chorus is alright and the last lil verse is alright,it'll prolly sound better on audio but its decent..lemme see the rest hen u done and ill give u better feedback,for now tho id say u gotta good start stay@it

u felt worthless, u were the mud gettin trambled upon
but u're also the example of a guy who gambled and won

a slinkin threath arised from your ink and sweat
we drink to your death, sit down and raise your glasses
it's time to save our breath and let the music speak for the masses

^^favorite pieces

nice drop homie id like ta hear this

like the little hook also good shit

thanks.. think i'ma record this one.. just gotta finish it first..

appreciate feedback tramatik!

let's go back to before u cracked your first jaw
when u lacked em bars, when u still jacked em cars
u were chased by the law and your mother threw you out
^^^^^ I Like This Part..

thanks.. uppin for feedback!

Uppin for feeeedback suckaaas!! haha

yeah the topic was pretty good rhymed the way through flow was on point, be good for a audio was not felling the hook much, but it will probley suit it better in audio my dude anyway my fav bar was this one

u felt worthless, u were the mud gettin trambled upon
but u're also the example of a guy who gambled and won

same one rhino pointed out