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Boards Dead At Tha Moment. So I Just Did This,,I Could've Gone On But I Got To Lazy lol

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Its The Metamorphoses On Death's Torture Lists
That Resorts In The Forces Of A Childs Origins
The Souls Of The Innocents Get Slaughtered In Suspense
Why Bother With Defence, Screams Drowned In Water Contents
As Fussy As Can Be, Luckily For Duckin Me.. Im Vengefull
Cuz I'm Psychologically Mental, Stab You With Rusty Cutlery To The Temple
Destroy Your Identity For My Serenity In Torture's Obsenity's
Leaving No Evidence, Just A Tape Recorder Of Killin My Enemy
Disturbed Thoughts Runnin' My Head, Lovin The Lead
Finish This With A Gun And Im Dead, Toughen The Spread
Of Evilness, Needles Hit You In Various Locations
In The Scariest Foundations Where Body's Get Dumped Off As Aquarius Donations

damn, gotta say i was suprised.. expected some other wack shit.. the first verse by u i've read.. sick vocab.. clever rhyming, rhyming a lot of syllables.. be a lil careful with rhyming too many syllables, it may seem forced.. but i don't think this verse did that.. i liked it.. def.. a solid drop.. really lookin forward to seein your next piece.. keep at it!

well i gotta say,this was pretty nice from u,didnt expect it 2 flow that nice or be that good,good shit..and as he said above,everything seemed 2 fit,liked it alot...u shud extend it tho or maybe do somethin similiar 2 it or whatever...but definetly keep that flow,its nice..keep droppin

Yeah i could've gone on but i got distracted from other shit.

Props on both of use for tha feed.

Much appreciated.