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I Could Not Remove My Sins, Even If I Prayed For ' Days-And-Nights '
I Pray-For-Lights, But Ill Never Get Too Heaven, Im ' Afraid-Of-Heights '
Dissing The Holy One, I Guess I Can Predict ' Torment-And-Pain ' ..
' Suck Up Your Thoughts ' Like I Stuck A ' Straw-In-Your-Brain ' ..
If Jesus Was Still Here, He Should Of Been ' Faced-With-Fraud..
Who Would Belive A Story, That Isnt True Just ' Based-On-Thought '
How Could People Belive This? How Could People ' Buy-This-Game '
If Jesus Was Strong And Brave, Why Did His Body ' Die-In-Vane ' .
People Got No Facts,Or No Case Without A ' Clue-Or-Witness '
If Jesus Was ' True And Real ' Why Cant People ' Prove-His-Exsistance ' ?
You'll Discover Jesus Was A Fake, and You'll Find Heaven-Is-Dirty..
I Told You I Was Right, Now I Got The Whole World Begging-For-Mercy.

hahaha^^

I Could Not Remove My Sins, Even If I Prayed For ' Days-And-Nights '
I Pray-For-Lights, But Ill Never Get Too Heaven, Im ' Afraid-Of-Heights '

brave topic and lyrically a strong verse.. actually it's very creative.. nice multies.. a solid drop.. long time no see, u came back strong with this one.. aint really much to pick on.. not to complicated vocab, but it sutis your drop... keep it up mini-me!

lol@mini me...anywhoooo...nice drop lil man this 2 bars below are the ones i thought that stood out the most.

If Jesus Was Still Here, He Should Of Been ' Faced-With-Fraud..
Who Would Belive A Story, That Isnt True Just ' Based-On-Thought '
How Could People Belive This? How Could People ' Buy-This-Game '
If Jesus Was Strong And Brave, Why Did His Body ' Die-In-Vane '

and another thing why do u still use quotes around ur 'multies' it makes it seems weird,ppl can read homie just let it go lol..unless it helps u somehow thats on u..just askin..but anyways good drop,liked how u took a step up from dissin 2 gettin into some debateable shit,nice

thanks guys, and yeah tramatik, thats just how i write my verses

This was pretty sweet man, haha don't sweet on using ' ' i use em as well sometimes.

Either way this was a nice drop. keep it up lil homie

8.5/10

I liked how you went away from your usually topics..
I liked you opener that you showed me yesterday i do believe..
but besides that i also like these..

If Jesus Was Still Here, He Should Of Been ' Faced-With-Fraud..
Who Would Belive A Story, That Isnt True Just ' Based-On-Thought '
How Could People Belive This? How Could People ' Buy-This-Game '
If Jesus Was Strong And Brave, Why Did His Body ' Die-In-Vane ' .

Nice use of multis made the verse better to read as well as it to flow better..
Stay with these sort of topics for now on..i like to see some verse with thought into em..
Good Job

This is probably the best ive seen from you. Nice flow and multis. Nice topic as well

Could Not Remove My Sins, Even If I Prayed For ' Days-And-Nights '
I Pray-For-Lights, But Ill Never Get Too Heaven, Im ' Afraid-Of-Heights '
Dissing The Holy One, I Guess I Can Predict ' Torment-And-Pain ' ..
' Suck Up Your Thoughts ' Like I Stuck A ' Straw-In-Your-Brain ' ..

I Liked Dat When i Read it...