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TRAMATIK
i aint lettin my nuts breathe,but slut plz
if u think u can handle this then suck these
dont forget 2 clean n wipe after u suck it mean n right
swallow then spit but wtf why is it GREEN N WHITE??
didnt i tell u not 2 suck it usin battery acid?
so what do i tell the doc when he see's n asks,shit

RH1NO
take 3 hits a acid, lick n pass it, im real as it gets n im kickin asses
rollin in hearses n tippin caskets, my crew go hard but you dicks are flacid
my lips spit sick you got a sore, the lyrics i kick a leave ya body tore
i recruit demons like a horrorcore("corpse"), ima king of battles but a god of war
off the dome i ride bitches like there backs bare for cab fair n leave em with hat hair
pop up on this site like ad ware, take ya sickest head, kill it, n stick it in glad ware
me and sherlock jockin in the lobby poppin watsons, wit john stockton, fucked up discussin stock options
i dont use caution til i stop coughin.. (doorbell).. stop knockin your defeating my thought process
watch this im beating my dick at mach speed and believe me.. a cop clocked it
my creed iss calamity, my enemies cant handle me, n my hood aint sick enough i need amity
even wit 16 bannin me i bleed vanity, though.. im not well mentally i wish i could plead sanity

CEE4
i think outta the box my brain grows on my arm, i`ll slap you with my dick just to show im a man,
i get down n dirty like pros on a farm, got my witchcraft condoms ready to fuck those hoes offa Charmed,
i`ll inject ya girl with HIV guess my First AID did it, if the pussy still aint burnin then i`ll spray mase in it
im literally armed with a sawn off theres no mistakin it, i`ll chop off ya arm and punch u in the face with it
now thats what i call a personal punch, i pick rappers like flowers and put they heads in a bunch
i`ll rob Jesus n have his fish and bread for my brunch, dismember him and save his legs til its lunch
fuck religon im down for some mad shit, let off rounds at the Catholics then drown John the Baptist
submerge u pussys in a tank full of cat piss, now that ive shitted on you i`ll wipe my ass with a cactus
i always keep rollin im Limp Bizcuit on Ecstacy, in the club trippin with a pimp midget here next to me
says he got bitches that wanna come sex with Cee, but i dont fuck midgets do i look like Complexity
im horrible to old people and evil to kids, all y`all faggots can bow down and give my ego a kiss
we`re the Gods of War aint no equal to this, we aint goin nowhere so wait for the sequel to hit

B-BEAR
i've ressurected now and i'm respected now, so unplug my respirator
got a mind cleaner then a cavity search up the ass of a DEA investigator
i'm makin blocks go dark when my flow spark the start of my revolution
spit resolutions on pollution, prostitution, any fuckin topic ur choosin
or u can brush the dirt of my shoulder, I didn't get this title in a flash
stacked bodies from my battles so long i can't even sell their vitals 4 cash
need money to make to world go 'round right? i'm hardly human
love it when girls go down on me, only need my 40's and a couple of cubans
dreamin of havin the hiltons in bed doing the pop, lock and drop it
aint got the body of a pornstar, i don't care as long as u drop, suck or pop it
orgasms flow off my tongue, havin the girls scream for the rolls royce of 69
guess if i loose about 10 pounds, i'll be the white version of royce Da 5'9''

GUTTA
I rep my block and rhyme, my type is hot, i ice my watch to try and freeze time to stop
nines or glocks, fuck it i'll fuck ya up with an upper cut, pockets fat like Bone Crusher gut..
I'll fuck ya slut, make red spread on ya pale face, the only time ya see me runnin..
IS WHEN THEY HOLLA JAIL BREAK.. from state to state come lookin great, same Bathing Apes..
same one ya say ya hate.. still breakin into crates that hold ya tapes, im foldin pap's..
Control ya click, i couldn't be touched by u, if ya arms was the length of a pogo stick..
So,tell ya homies and ya pals its on it, Gutta walk around the hood with a stack as fat as Countess Vaughn..
Put down ya Arms, like ya reaching to touch the ground, its Gods Of War mothafucka and we run this town

Man. Before I even read this, I'm going to tell you, I am pretty excited to see this.

I predict gutta is going to have a raw verse to end it.

Let's go.

Tramatiks

Verse was mildly funny, though not constructed as well as I expected.
I'm a little bit disappointed, but it's nice to see a different side of you.
We get a lot of serious from the T-Man. I think you come off a little bit
like me when you do the comedy/misogynistic role though. It seems kinda
forced and not as natural as when we spit about them real topics.







Rhino

Nice flow to kick it off Rhino, this was dope "rollin in hearses n tippin caskets"

The rest, eh, it wasn't really working for me, but that adware line was funny.

Your verse would still rank pretty high compared to the rest and I won't put
in any particular order, because you're starting to put together all elements
of a verse into one package.








Cee 4

Haha,

got my witchcraft condoms ready to fuck those hoes offa Charmed,

"i`ll inject ya girl with HIV guess my First AID did it, if the pussy still aint burnin then i`ll spray mase in it"

not so much a great line, but a real funny one, don't miss that one people

im literally armed with a sawn off theres no mistakin it, i`ll chop off ya arm and punch u in the face with it
now thats what i call a personal punch, i pick rappers like flowers and put they heads in a bunch

Dope PUNCH, homie. Pretty original, I think too, I would recycle that shit at least 10 times. (in raps, not battles)

"fuck religon im down for some mad shit, let off rounds at the Catholics then drown John the Baptist "

word

The rest of the verse I wasn't feeling, not just because you dissed me. It didn't feel as special as the latter part of the verse.

Good job though man. I was pretty impressed. I think this is my favorite written by you yet.







B-Bear!

I didn't even notice you when I skimmed through the list of people on the collab.

A great surprise. It will be interesting to see how you do. *reads*

"i'm makin blocks go dark when my flow spark the start of my revolution
spit resolutions on pollution, prostitution, any fuckin topic ur choosin "

Not a perfect line, but an effective one.

"or u can brush the dirt of my shoulder, I didn't get this title in a flash
stacked bodies from my battles so long i can't even sell their vitals 4 cash "

B-Bear is not a punchline king, "stacked bodies from my battles, so long"

Come on you got better than that!

"dreamin of havin the hiltons in bed doing the pop, lock and drop it
aint got the body of a pornstar, i don't care as long as u drop, suck or pop it
orgasms flow off my tongue, havin the girls scream for the rolls royce of 69
guess if i loose about 10 pounds, i'll be the white version of royce Da 5'9'' "

A little dumbed down for a b-bear drop, but I liked it in general.





Gutta - I wanted that sense of gangsta on this track. I needed it! Here we go *reads*

First line was sick.

"Control ya click, i couldn't be touched by u, if ya arms was the length of a pogo stick"

Nice.

Overall, I liked it, it was a more balanced drop and less sporadic then some of your friends drops, but
it also had some awkward moments.

"same one ya say ya hate.. still breakin into crates that hold ya tapes, im foldin pap's.. "

Not so much. You need to work on your verses corresponding in flow/rhymes, etc.



OVERALL: I love to give real feedback because I genuinely care, about your verses.

I want to see what kinda creative shit, people are coming up with.

Unlike Domino, Micz, etc.

So, I think this crew works, I love all the different perceptions.

Overall: 8.5/10

Uppin

appreciate the detailed feed plex

we all just tried ta have some fun with this one

uppin some feed

yeah Plex good lookin with tha feed man. i was drunk/high and other shit when i wrote the verse and i couldnt think of anythin else that would rhyme. Appreciate the feed ya midget fucker lol

Tramatik- Your verse was aight it was kinda funny, good structure, kinda simplistic tho, but overall its was pretty coo.

Fave bars:

i aint lettin my nuts breathe,but slut plz
if u think u can handle this then suck these

dont forget 2 clean n wipe after u suck it mean n right
swallow then spit but wtf why is it GREEN N WHITE??

Rh1no- The first two bars were sick! You had some good multies, your whole verse flowed nice IMO, this was definitely one of your better verses.

Fave bars:

take 3 hits a acid, lick n pass it, im real as it gets n im kickin asses
rollin in hearses n tippin caskets, my crew go hard but you dicks are flacid

my lips spit sick you got a sore, the lyrics i kick a leave ya body tore
i recruit demons like a horrorcore("corpse"), ima king of battles but a god of war

my creed iss calamity, my enemies cant handle me, n my hood aint sick enough i need amity
even wit 16 bannin me i bleed vanity, though.. im not well mentally i wish i could plead sanity

Cee4- Damn…….. Your punches, multies, structure, flow, was perfect, most of the bars in ya verse had me cracking up!

Fave bars:

i think outta the box my brain grows on my arm, i`ll slap you with my dick just to show im a man,
i get down n dirty like pros on a farm, got my witchcraft condoms ready to fuck those hoes offa Charmed,

i`ll inject ya girl with HIV guess my First AID did it, if the pussy still aint burnin then i`ll spray mase in it
im literally armed with a sawn off theres no mistakin it, i`ll chop off ya arm and punch u in the face with it

i always keep rollin im Limp Bizcuit on Ecstacy, in the club trippin with a pimp midget here next to me
says he got bitches that wanna come sex with Cee, but i dont fuck midgets do i look like Complexity

B-Bear- The first 2 bars were kinda weak, but you ur next two bars were aight, but then u fell of again! Lol.
Overall, your verse was here and there, some bars I liked, some bars I didn't, still a pretty solid drop tho.

Fave bars:

or u can brush the dirt of my shoulder, I didn't get this title in a flash
stacked bodies from my battles so long i can't even sell their vitals 4 cash

dreamin of havin the hiltons in bed doing the pop, lock and drop it
aint got the body of a pornstar, i don't care as long as u drop, suck or pop it

orgasms flow off my tongue, havin the girls scream for the rolls royce of 69
guess if i loose about 10 pounds, i'll be the white version of royce Da 5'9''

Gutta- Your verse was pretty good, the first bar was sick, but you kinda fell off with tha last bar.

Fave bars:

I rep my block and rhyme, my type is hot, i ice my watch to try and freeze time to stop
nines or glocks, fuck it i'll fuck ya up with an upper cut, pockets fat like Bone Crusher gut..

same one ya say ya hate.. still breakin into crates that hold ya tapes, im foldin pap's..
Control ya click, i couldn't be touched by u, if ya arms was the length of a pogo stick..

appreciate the great feed from you guys

cheers for the feedback Prophet. Man over 100 views and 2 people left feedback! Everyone must of read this about 4 times each lol

lmao i kno right

LMAO DIDNT EVEN NOTICE THAT HAHA

i know i dont leave much feed in the scriptures but still man 100 views and two peoples feedback?. im kinda pissed cause its like wasting your time writing a verse and using punchlines that you coulda used in a battle. im not droppin in the scriptures again unless its a crew drop. im not that bothered but its just a waste of time imo. i only did a couple of verses in the scriptures cause nobody battles anymore and to be honest theres not much keeping me on here anymore apart from the GOW drops

nah c4, that's a little wack to say, but you definitely have a point.

complexity wrote:nah c4, that's a little wack to say, but you definitely have a point.

dont get me wrong this is a dope site with a lotta talent on it but in my opinion its just not happening at the moment. i know im right and you know im right. we just need some new people to freshen it up. ive got no idea how to get new people but the site needs its. the scriptures really aint my thing and i know im being hypocritical regardin my comments about people leavin fedback but at the moment theres not much do in my opinion. theres only so many Complexity and Tramatik verses i can read in the scriptures(no hate cause both of you are fuckin dope) we just need some new faces or somethin. Plus pwople must get tired of battles with ME and Prophet all the time lol.

btw Plex i called you out but you aint responded. Same with Kurse lol

this will make it 13 responses. if i keep rambling we can beat Pzy1 lol

I see.