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B4 i say anything...aye Rhino the caps bring back memories?lmao..anyways..i wrote those in all caps cuz this whole thing from my perspective iz str8 anger..leave a lil feed

IM'A SAY THIS ONE TIME
IM JUSTA RAP ARTIST
WHO AINT TOUCHIN GUNZ
SO MY GAT AINT THE HARDEST
BUT IM TELLIN U NOW
I ACT THE SMARTEST
ALTHOUGH THIS GOD DAMN
WACK CHART IS
JUST GONNA FUCKIN
CIRCLE BACK'TA TARGET
ALL THE YOUNG PEOPLE
SUCH AS U AND ME
WHILE WE WATCH THESE
RAPPERS,DO THE TYPE A SHIT
THAT WE DO FOR FREE
SO INSIDE MY MIND
U KNO THE SCREWS'LL BE
POPPIN OUT,IF I SEE
ONE MORE FUCKIN BOI BAND
CREW LET FREE
TA BLAZE N SWIRL
BUT FUCK IT I GUESS
ITS WAYS OF THE WORLD
NOW TELL ME
CAN U SOAK UP THE MEANIN
WITHOUT CHOKIN N BLEEDIN?
I'LL SAY IT TA YALL
MAN IM BROKE N FEININ
WORDS HITTIN YA HARDER
THEN COKE N WEED N
IM FLYIN THRU
I AINT LYIN'TA U
OR CRYIN'TA U
JUST STATIN IM BACK
I KNO U FAGGOTS
BE HATIN THE FACT
THAT IM THE REALIST
ELIMINATIN THE WACK
DESTORYIN NEONE
CREATIN A TRACK

yea it was written 4 audio..im gonna record it either soon or once i get my mic in like 5 or 6 days,thanks 4 the feed tho..uppin

Dope shit man. You breakin down the typical rap barrier.

concept wise this was good.. lyrically it was basic as fuck audio lyrics or not.

if your going to express your self take more time and go into detail about instead of writting 5-6 words for one line..

It wasn't really basic to the extent that freeflo represents.

It's about average on Illest for flow, wordplay, and multis, etc.

The problem lies with the lack of illustration in the verse. It takes like 10 lines to even be interested in what your saying.

I didn't find this to be that good, but not that bad. The emotion was good and it balanced some of the lameness that radiated off this drop.

"I KNO U FAGGOTS
BE HATIN THE FACT
THAT IM THE REALIST
ELIMINATIN THE WACK
DESTORYIN NEONE
CREATIN A TRACK"

That's all freestyle material. Not written, I took time on it, and it's ready to be distributed to the masses.

"CIRCLE BACK'TA TARGET
ALL THE YOUNG PEOPLE
SUCH AS U AND ME
WHILE WE WATCH THESE
RAPPERS,DO THE TYPE A SHIT
THAT WE DO FOR FREE "

Ask Jesus, who said a line like that, and you might want to exclude it.

Keep it up though.

ALTHOUGH THIS GOD DAMN
WACK CHART IS
JUST GONNA FUCKIN
CIRCLE BACK'TA TARGET
ALL THE YOUNG PEOPLE
SUCH AS U AND ME
WHILE WE WATCH THESE
RAPPERS,DO THE TYPE A SHIT
THAT WE DO FOR FREE


CAN U SOAK UP THE MEANIN
WITHOUT CHOKIN N BLEEDIN?
I'LL SAY IT TA YALL
MAN IM BROKE N FEININ

i Liked this... From u My Dood..

Vince LoL i Wus Feelin this it Seemed like u wus Pissed on in Fuckin eminem Type Mode

Keep Doin u.. i Liked the Multis.. ( Feed Back is Appreciated)

good lookz on the feed shaz n i got u