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If I make up a character with a plot n a scheme
it's means more to you than a thought or a dream
Life is like looking at a shot from the glock in reverse
it's seen in retrospect, so that's how i'm droppin a verse
the examiners pronounce him dead at the scene
then the machines light turns from red back to green
the doctors jump into the ambulance with a backflip
they leave weavin backwards into oncoming traffic
its silent, the siren scream becomes a distant sound
the hollow tip whistles as a kid hits the ground
a man in all black is walking into a convience store
he puts a six pack back into the freezer door
I make sure the bitch is down, unload the round
check to make sure that nobody I knows around
ur going down in a minute, i hop off in my whip
I get lost in my thoughts, then I drop it in sixth
I run thru a red light, and look in my rear view
see myself pass by, in hindsight which is clear view

this had a lot of thought into it, really a dope peice to sit down and think about, i love these topics and i thought you executed it precisely, it was good how you played off bars, and the sequence of the whole drop caught my attention, not to much i really can say that was bad .. but i think your weakest bar. was

Life is like looking at a shot from the glock in reverse
it's seen in retrospect, so that's how i'm droppin a verse

Just My View.. Let Me Break this down.

If I make up a character with a plot n a scheme
it's means more to you than a thought or a dream

not a bad opener, could of had abit more grunt into it though.

Life is like looking at a shot from the glock in reverse
it's seen in retrospect, so that's how i'm droppin a verse

Weakest Bar IMO.

the examiners pronounce him dead at the scene
then the machines light turns from red back to green

Not Bad, Your First 3 bars were nothing compared to the rest of your verse..
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he doctors jump into the ambulance with a backflip
they leave weavin backwards into oncoming traffic

^ getting the msg accross now much better..

it's silent, the siren scream becomes a distant sound
besides from the echo when the clip hit the ground

^ the story is all coming together, dope bar.. people could relate to this

I make sure the bitch is down, unload the round
check to make sure that nobody I knows around

^ another dope bar, people could feel this aswell

ur going down in a minute, i hop off in my whip
I get lost in my thoughts, then I drop it in sixth

a good set up for your next bar

I run thru a red light, and look in my rear view
see myself pass by, in hindsight which is clear view

^ nice finish

overall complexity i thought this was a really good drop, sorta made me think

highlights were

I run thru a red light, and look in my rear view
see myself pass by, in hindsight which is clear view
it's silent, the siren scream becomes a distant sound
besides from the echo when the clip hit the ground
I make sure the bitch is down, unload the round
check to make sure that nobody I knows around

I make sure the bitch is down, unload the round
check to make sure that nobody I knows around
ur going down in a minute, i hop off in my whip
I get lost in my thoughts, then I drop it in sixth
I run thru a red light, and look in my rear view
see myself pass by, in hindsight which is clear view
^ Part i Like the Most.. This wus Pretty Str8

nice shit plex, stayed right on topic the whole time, ill verse dude, straight up

Thanks for all the feedback.