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Posted: Tue Dec 25, 2007 3:47 pm
by Gutta
Changein it up for Illest Lyrics

Check it

I never had shit in this world I'm still tryin to get what I never had
You prolly think id be sellin crack, but man all your Decembers was never bad (XMAS)
That's why I'm quick to let the shotti spit, never thought up, kids was brought up on Gotti shit, Involved in no politics, it was something they didn't want us with
And the cold was a bitch, every Christmas, Coal wadn't what the Naughty get
NOTHING was what he'd prolly get, Packin so much heat you thought he sweat,
And at an early age, stretching your girl out like a pilate stretch
It takes a lot of understanding to understand how my Daddy left me Alone, standing
My momma even thinking bout Pole dancing, man I got it worse then the Joad family
No man put out his hand to feed me, I'm telling u my story man and u actin like U cant believe me, Why else you see me on them streets cocking back the hammer freely?
Shit, I'll still be grabbin at them Keys till the man will free me
Now I'm standing on the curb, broke, puffin on some Herb Smoke
It's twenty degrees on these streets and I aint got on a Fur Coat
My veins is numb, Talkin to fiends who waitin for they cocaine to come
Or with dudes who will pull out they thangs and bang out ya brains with guns
When the danger come, You see me like Fuck the Holidays! I got the beretta Son
Chedda aint neva come, Merry Christmas motherfucker! Hope next year a better one!


holidays??

Posted: Tue Dec 25, 2007 7:46 pm
by Brah-Vo
Wow.
Just wow.
Nothing more i can say.

Posted: Thu Dec 27, 2007 2:03 am
by ~Symbolikull~
pretty deep man, nice switch up

Posted: Thu Dec 27, 2007 6:10 am
by Gutta
Gracias Ghost

uppin par mas feedback por favor

Posted: Thu Dec 27, 2007 8:40 am
by Haz
Pretty Much Sucked My Dood

Posted: Thu Dec 27, 2007 12:07 pm
by Cee4
i liked this a lot. i dont think its as good as a couple of your recent drops but its still dope. The flow pretty much stayed on point the whole way through. My favorite part of this was the last couple of bars

My veins is numb, Talkin to fiends who waitin for they cocaine to come
Or with dudes who will pull out they thangs and bang out ya brains with guns
When the danger come, You see me like Fuck the Holidays! I got the beretta Son
Chedda aint neva come, Merry Christmas motherfucker! Hope next year a better one!

Posted: Thu Dec 27, 2007 3:14 pm
by Gutta
thanks Cee


Hazard y tha fuck u gotta keep talkin shit? ur Kwick E mart out of business or something? fucking Paki piece of shit

Posted: Sun Dec 30, 2007 7:08 pm
by complexity
Dope rap. As usual, I am impressed.

I know you're not a fan of Jay Z but some of the flow seemed like Jay.

haha.

I loved how everything connected.

"And at an early age, stretching your girl out like a pilate stretch
It takes a lot of understanding to understand how my Daddy left me Alone, standing
My momma even thinking bout Pole dancing, man I got it worse then the Joad family
No man put out his hand to feed me, I'm telling u my story man and u actin like U cant believe me, Why else you see me on them streets cocking back the hammer freely?
Shit, I'll still be grabbin at them Keys till the man will free me "

^Crazy

"Now I'm standing on the curb, broke, puffin on some Herb Smoke
It's twenty degrees on these streets and I aint got on a Fur Coat
My veins is numb, Talkin to fiends who waitin for they cocaine to come
Or with dudes who will pull out they thangs and bang out ya brains with guns "

Nice imagery ^

Don't get me wrong, it was nowhere near perfect.

You fell off big time on your rhyme scheme compared to other drops.

It started nice and simplified as the verse went on.

The flow wasn't constant at all.

The emotion, creativity and development of ideas made it come together where the flow didn't though.

8/10