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Im surrounded no escape, bundy in the front jack ripper in the rear
knowing queering dont make the world go round, the devil whisper in my ear
when the devil comes near the angels run in fear while his demons shout out and leer
struck by a spear like jesus on the cross still lost go back lying in a babys cot
rick ross shoutin out he a boss while bow wow says the same thing, not knowing the cost
blowing cut rocks while a black man shows off his locks
the asian man stands and hammers the railway in place
while 50 cent brags he was sprayed in the face
sprayed in the face or sprayed by mace dissapear no one to chase
i become the case in the newest edition of gone without a trace
still settin the pace detective doing over time
attempt to evade danger so i jump over mines
big men cant get laid without paying man
so the paying man becomes the laying man
laying man becomes the swaying man
in a deal where he cant make up his mind
back where i started bundy in front ripper behind
failed so i trip the land mine last second my clip lands in your back spine

word..

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Long keystyle lol ^_^

Decent for a keystyle, mutlies were ok, flow was choppy in some parts, I'd give it a 5.5/10, but keep dropping, your definitely getting better

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Im surrounded no escape, bundy in the front jack ripper in the rear
knowing queering dont make the world go round, the devil whisper in my ear
when the devil comes near the angels run in fear while his demons shout out and leer
struck by a spear like jesus on the cross still lost go back lying in a babys cot
rick ross shoutin out he a boss while bow wow says the same thing, not knowing the cost
blowing cut rocks while a black man shows off his locks

thia was alrite. flow was a little choppy like prophet said but u definitly improving. Thfirst couple bars were good then you kinda fell off a little but thats usually what happens when its off the top.

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Im surrounded no escape, bundy in the front jack ripper in the rear
knowing queering dont make the world go round, the devil whisper in my ear
when the devil comes near the angels run in fear while his demons shout out and leer
struck by a spear like jesus on the cross still lost go back lying in a babys cot
rick ross shoutin out he a boss while bow wow says the same thing, not knowing the cost

It was straight.

"Im surrounded no escape, bundy in the front jack ripper in the rear
knowing queering dont make the world go round, the devil whisper in my ear "

Quoting ultimate warrior in raps, that's interesting.

This didn't have the emotion, or "lyrical" strength that most of your drops have.

And a lot of iffy flowing and awkward phrasing.

I.E. "rick ross shoutin out he a boss while bow wow says the same thing, not knowing the cost
blowing cut rocks while a black man shows off his locks
the asian man stands and hammers the railway in place "

I'd give it a 6/10 for a keystyle.

Good to see you back in the scriptures though.

Keep it up.

word. thanks for the feed guys.