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Punchline Peice

Posted: Sat Jan 05, 2008 4:44 pm
by MesaR
pains-the-deal, im the punchline king, the proclaimed multi-magician,,
You'll Say Wayne-Is-I'll, And You Claim-Your-'Real' Thats Faulty-Fiction!
What Ya Sayings-I'll?, You Got No Brains, Like Your 'Domes-Abandoned'
Battles Are My Playing-Filed, Dropping First Like Its My Home-Advantage
You'll Be Collecting ' Retire-Fines ' Because What You Type-Is-Shit
Fourth Bar, Prier-Lines Are 'Fire-Rhymes' That Will Ignite-Ya-Script
Straight Gunning-U, ' A Felon-Thought ', Wasting Time Versin-Tha-Weak!
My Record's Like Running-Nude, Not Getting-Caught, A Perfect-Streak!
Youz-A-Trick, When I Choose-To-Spit, Its Male Rape I'll Abuse-This-Dick
Fuck The Views-And-Shit, My Vocab's I'll A Doper Word To Use-Then-Sik!

Upping

Posted: Sat Jan 05, 2008 5:42 pm
by ~Symbolikull~
pains-the-deal, im the punchline king, the proclaimed multi-magician,,
You'll Say Wayne-Is-I'll, And You Claim-Your-'Real' Thats Faulty-Fiction!

Straight Gunning-U, ' A Felon-Thought ', Wasting Time Versin-Tha-Weak!
My Record's Like Running-Nude, Not Getting-Caught, A Perfect-Streak!

i wanna know how you proclaim yourself the multi king when 2 thirds of your bars have endin multies that arent even multies???????

Posted: Sat Jan 05, 2008 7:19 pm
by MesaR
i dont really think that it was a filler line, regradless of what i have said i dont think i am.

now goodbye upping

Posted: Sun Jan 06, 2008 12:29 am
by ~Symbolikull~
punches werent very hard, this wasnt a stand out punchline verse, some of it jus dont work and the others are forced

Posted: Sun Jan 06, 2008 12:52 am
by Cee4
didnt really like this.
id have expected better punches from a Punchline Piece
it was kinda hard to understand and some of it didnt make sense to me.
also most of it seemed forced.

i think u tried too hard with this
you been improving a lot recently and compared to your recent drops this was shit lol

Posted: Wed Jan 09, 2008 4:06 am
by Viral
for a punchline piece..ima have to go wit....not really..dere were punches...but nothing that really stood out very much to me...maybe from all da damn decoration of ur bars....i coulda caught the flow better.....but i dont really see it being possible....ne ways...keep it up...it was OK! for 5 bars

Posted: Fri Jan 11, 2008 9:39 am
by Brah-Vo
Good piece seq.
Great punches but like above nothing really remarkable.
To me it's just another sequence punchline piece ya know? lol
Keep up my man.