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My Story Part 1

Posted: Sat Jan 26, 2008 4:06 pm
by Brah-Vo
Listen ..

you might heard i was on the verge of losin my mind
cruisin through time, on the tip of an iceberg
Mentally stressed, i was insane at best
with chains i was blessed, i gained nothin less
lain down to rest, ashamed i was a mess
but i was always awake, coz the game gave me no rest
No hope, from my dreams i awoke, a cross tattooed to my chest
I prayed to God to choke the death out of my breath
Fell to another level when my grandaddy left
had many regrets, but found fam in other rebels
We hung, while they blew shit in they lungs
but homies was whack, lied about how they sprayed guns
so i stopped hangin with em, coz they were fake
i was alone again, no friends so i stayed home late
took out a pad and pen, with my heart i signed
wrote down my feelings and shit started to rhyme
I was amazed, magic happened in front of me on the page
my rage was gone and away, my wildest dreams i started to chase
Started out simple, i wrote "God's Most Hated"
with each word i wrote slowly but surely my woes faded ....

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New series im working on .. Continuous pieces that are relatively short, loosely and somewhat abstractly written about my life. Alot of figurative language and images and it will be a very subjective series to you, the reader. hope You enjoy ^_^

Posted: Sun Jan 27, 2008 12:31 pm
by Brah-Vo
Upping .....

Posted: Sun Jan 27, 2008 12:42 pm
by Omega Bill
NICE.

Flowed really well and you can tell the story behind the rhymes is real. I was gonna do one about my life so far but I dunno if I wanna tap into that stuff yet, I know what you mean about your grandpa an stuff like that, I lost all my grandparents and an aunt, but I just cant write about it yet.

I like reading these kinda drops because it shows that everyone here is real and not always rappin to win battles, or rappin bout money and makin fun of niggas.

Good drop man, I'll be waiting for the next parts in this series.

Posted: Sun Jan 27, 2008 3:09 pm
by Arvincible
ey so what happened to ur other story?

Posted: Sun Jan 27, 2008 3:43 pm
by Arvincible
my bad raiza, this was tiiiiiight lol

Posted: Sun Jan 27, 2008 5:09 pm
by Haz
We hung, while they blew shit in they lungs
but homies was whack, lied about how they sprayed guns
so i stopped hangin with em, coz they were fake
i was alone again, no friends so i stayed home late
took out a pad and pen, with my heart i signed
wrote down my feelings and shit started to rhyme

^ Favorite part of ya Verse..

This Wus a Good Flow.. The story got Undastood Easily...
i'll be Waitin Fa ya Next One..

Posted: Mon Jan 28, 2008 3:33 pm
by Prophet
This was pretty good fam, you've really improved your multies, definitely had a dope flow, nice imagery and vocab, this is prolly the best piece I've read from you.

Posted: Mon Jan 28, 2008 4:57 pm
by Brah-Vo
Good Looks on the feed everybody!
Uppin for summore feed/

Posted: Tue Jan 29, 2008 7:20 am
by M.O.B
same as Haz good shit

Posted: Wed Jan 30, 2008 2:08 am
by complexity
I'm definitely feeling this drop little homie.

It's probably the most impressive thing you have dropped.

When it relates to creativity and staying on concept.

"you might heard i was on the verge of losin my mind
cruisin through time, on the tip of an iceberg
Mentally stressed, i was insane at best
with chains i was blessed, i gained nothin less
lain down to rest, ashamed i was a mess "