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Dreamin of this shit got inspired to share this...

I stir in the night as my sight blurs
A blind swirl visions in my mind curls
I stand in a heavenly place of pleasure
Where I feel comfort without measure
The white blankets and the marbled walls
The white roses and some waterfalls
Some cotton clouds and some butterflies
This isn't all, I wonder where the others lie
A calming, fair breeze hits my bare knees
Those who earned the life to do as they dare please
I saw it clear, my smile widened from ear to ear
Dead livin carefree, ironically in this dead dream
I shudder, I soon see a red gleam, my head screams...
Then again awaken, sweat smothered face,
Just to myself in another place
I turn to learn I'm stranded, empty handed
Realizin where the hell ithis dream has landed
Horror stricken, the sight wasn't right, it wasn't well
Torching, a fiery scorch with rotten corpses-hell
Never seen such a scene, of such im dreamin'
Evil beings stare, and smile the bloody smile of demons.
But itz twisted, there were no horns or tails expected
They were people, a portal of immortals ressurrected
Those rejected...a dry throat tries to cry for help
Just to hear: "you will not wake, ur by yourself"
The response haunts me as the demons taunt me
To see their wicked souls is still so daunting
Don't know how much more that I could take
Its some mistake, but soon enough I know ill wake...

This was real good shit man. I was playing this dream through my mind when I was reading, good imagery, and I like how the whole thing came together and it flowed really well.

Nice Piece Man

Hmm.
Im impressed arvy boy.
This is my favorite piece from you.
The imagery was amazing and you described everything with intricate detail.
The multies found themselves in places where i thought u couldnt have multies at times (if u get what i mean lol) and the flow was surprisingly good. A great all round piece where you didnt compromise or sacrifice any elements of a good written.
Good job buddy.

The white blankets and the marbled walls
The white roses and some waterfalls
Some cotton clouds and some butterflies
This isn't all, I wonder where the others lie
A calming, fair breeze hits my bare knees
Those who earned the life to do as they dare please
I saw it clear, my smile widened from ear to ear
Dead livin carefree, ironically in this dead dream
I shudder, I soon see a red gleam, my head screams...
Then again awaken, sweat smothered face,
Just to myself in another place
I turn to learn I'm stranded, empty handed
Realizin where the hell ithis dream has landed


i Dont Like u ... but i Like That^^ .. Keep Droppin Kid..

Lol thanks for the feed guys much appreciated uppin for mas feedback

pretty cool...liked the whole dream think,im doin a song soon i might record where im trapped in'a dream myself...buttttttt...this wasnt bad i was feelin it..nothin 2 spectaculiar but it wuz worth the read,keep it up