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Felt Like Drioppin Some Gangsta shit .. Well hey. better then nothin.

Look at me i got a mask on my face, the tasks i chase,the macs i make shiit nigga the bullets can last me days
watchit when my .44 make the pow sound, i show towns and make niggaz say we shoudlnt fuck with those clowns
get run up to and jack ya jewelrrey, fuck ya buffonary, fuck the fool in me who you choose to see
who you spose to be? u goin so pale u look like a ghost to me, respect, never regret, so throw up a toast to me
make a name for myself, my shoe closet be the proof of my wealth, championship shit gold nigga thats MY BELT
like world war 1 i still use mustard gas,, bravery? bullshit you can muster that, cant trust a nigga so i trust my gat
evidence you find open caps plus a smokin mac, foolish niggaz should be hopin that we dont come back
step behind me try and find me, hopin a big label would finally sign me, be careful make sure u know where the line be (HAHA)
here i go im goin beserk, pray at church this shit gonna hurt its the end of your last supper, here comes desert YA DIGG?
massacred ya family, ya house looks like wartorn lebanon heavens gone so you feel forlorn, i gave u one killing but u asked for four more
keep my hands close to the mace, ya hunnys in a comatose that i made, his ghost starts to fade, coz just like space, i left black holes in his face!!

uppin.

yo this is okay, its not as good as the other shit though..

My fave lines were

massacred ya family, ya house looks like wartorn lebanon heavens gone so you feel forlorn, i gave u one killing but u asked for four more
keep my hands close to the mace, ya hunnys in a comatose that i made, his ghost starts to fade, coz just like space, i left black holes in his face!!

All i Gotta Say iz Get Real..

well dude,u definetly elevatin which iz good,ur gettin a good grasp of multis..structure iz ehhh..i saw u mentioned in chill u dont write 2 beats so structure wudnt matter IF u wrote 2 a beat..but u didnt so the structure isnt the greatest..keep droppin that ur elevatin quick but dont get big headed u still have alot 2 work on, as we all do,keep it up tho peace

uuping

it was ah.. i didnt read it, the structure is too much man, you need bars

Look at me i got a mask on my face, the tasks i chase,
the macs i make shiit nigga the bullets can last me days//
***i know ur tryin to get better wit multies, but the trick is not forcin...

watchit when my .44 make the pow sound, i show towns
and make niggaz say we shoudlnt fuck with those clowns//
***pow/show-those - notta match not bad tho

get run up to and jack ya jewelrrey, fuck ya buffonary,
fuck the fool in me who you choose to see
who you spose to be? u goin so pale u look like a ghost to me,
respect, never regret, so throw up a toast to me
***buffonary? not rhymin well here, it flowed well tho

make a name for myself, my shoe closet be the proof of my wealth,
championship shit gold nigga thats MY BELT//
*** simple/basic but not too bad

like world war 1 i still use mustard gas,,
bravery? bullshit you can muster that, cant trust a nigga so i trust my gat
***this was by far the best rhymin bar

evidence you find open caps plus a smokin mac,
foolish niggaz should be hopin that we dont come back
*** nice continuance

step behind me try and find me, hopin a big label would finally sign me,
be careful make sure u know where the line be (HAHA)
*** ok one of the better parts

here i go im goin beserk, pray at church this shit gonna hurt its the end of your last supper, here comes desert YA DIGG?
*** NO

massacred ya family, ya house looks like wartorn lebanon heavens gone so you feel forlorn, i gave u one killing but u asked for four more
*** not really there

keep my hands close to the mace, ya hunnys in a comatose that i made, his ghost starts to fade, coz just like space, i left black holes in his face!!
*** mace? werent u jus talkin about gats n smokin gats wit shot rounds on the ground

lmao! thanks for breakin it down homie.
time to give u a shitload of feed now.
Good Lookin out.

Aye glad to see you're not trying to be one dimensional and tryin different styles.

I liked it for the most part, even though I dont really like gangsta pieces, haha.

Gotta go with Ghost and TGYH though, you're elevating quickly and your use of multis is gettin better, like TG said you got work on your structure and some stuff sounds forced. Just be you lil pimpin an it will all come together quicker than you know. By the way, that shit in the shoutbox the other night was fire. Do it like that everytime.