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well heres an open collab i hadda chance 2 jump on,it wuz open on Hard Target's soundclick and allowed neone 2 give it a shot as long as they gave props on their page n i did..soo my verse iz last,tell me whatcha think..lyrics are on the page if u need em too.

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=6260265

thanks jj,uppinnn

Lyrics Were Good, With Delivery And Flow u Had The Right idea But i Say Work On it. What i Mean is u Delivered it Well But Fell Off Beat a Couple Of Times, Sounded Like it Was To Catch ur Breath Or u Tripped On a Word. Work On Which Parts u Can Breathe at Yet Not Lose The Flow. ur Voice Sounds Forced Like ur Putting it On, But i Donno That's Just How i Heard it. if u Trip On Words it's Usually Because The Last Word Ends in a Letter That's Gnna Make Spitting The Next Word Hard, Like a Tongue Twister if u Get Me. id Say Redo it The Same Way But Don't Make Any Breathing Mistakes This Time, Then You'll Have Quite a Dope Track.

I liked your verse a lot better than the last one I left fed on. Delivery was there, good lyrics were there, flow was there. Only I could point out was what Domino said in prolly 1 or 2 parts you kinda fell off the beat, but no worries, its not like it ruined your verse.

Good shit man.

i really liked the lyrics in your verse, good job.

you Came Nicer in this Joint den Alot of ur Others..
ya Flow wus Smooth.. & the Lyrics wus good for the song..

thanks 4 the feed yall,im'a try keepin up with the delivery n shit like i did with this one,n work on what Dom said,but thanks 4 the feed n if theres nemore neone else wud like 2 contribute that'd be cool

Even though you fell off a couple times, this was, imo, your best audio verse by far. Keep practicing dude, you'll be aright.

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i jus dont like ur voice, sounds like you struggle to mumble, but this one is prolly the better of all ur audios, so thats a plus. props keep droppin

its all good,thanks 4 the feed tho man

i was surprised wen i heard this...its pretty good man...i liked it...def keep doin ya thing....im up for ne collabs n wat not....get at me if ur interested