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Posted: **Sun Feb 17, 2008 8:46 pm**

these people to slow-to-listen, that's why they dont know-im-spitting
my flows-never-bitten, this cant be reality, even though-im-wishing
i show smears-of-greatness im lucky, i dont show the years-of-lateness
sequence elvates everday, since im a vicitm of the shear-im-patience
ive had these weird thoughts to rape-your-wife, then scrape-the-knife
in these days-of-strife, i pick up the pad like it's my escape-from-life
there's no gimics-i-spit there strait sick like every single bar-was-vomit
the critics-are-quick, rap's my getaway it's ironic im never far-from-it..

Posted: **Mon Feb 18, 2008 9:26 pm**

yo this was nice, like it alot, keep more coming.

Posted: **Mon Feb 18, 2008 9:38 pm**

pretty nice...kinda reminds me of some shit i'd say...in a way i think i did kinda spit some stuff with that same meaning

Posted: **Wed Feb 20, 2008 6:59 am**

it was aight, i think you need to quit tryin so hard to put all kinds of rhymes in your verses and your flow would be better

Posted: **Thu Feb 21, 2008 3:44 pm**

"sequence elvates everday, since im a vicitm of the shear-im-patience
ive had these weird thoughts to rape-your-wife, then scrape-the-knife
in these days-of-strife, i pick up the pad like it's my escape-from-life "

This was cool. I liked it a lot.

You wanted to use the adjective patient.

I didn't like much more than I read, and I might disagree with my friend symbolikull a little bit, but that's for another day.

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