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this isn't a direct diss...but you should know who ya are...you feel me? so fall off my nut hairs tarzan.

Verses in Blue are THAPHANTOM
Verses in Orange are Khan-Verse
The chorus is in Red

V1:
I'ma finish this steak and just start-the-beef.
I make you tremble cause my heart-for-heat.
When I start-tah-speak, I know i bring fear-to-ya-heart.
It'd be sagacious for you to stop before I tear-ya-apart.
i'm unstable, just look into the eyes of a wild-man.
I turned the tables, i'm bringin you down like quick sand.
You're unable, i'm surprised if you weren't aghast.
like this is a fable, naw homie i'd whoop that-ass.
Put ya dukes up and come see me.
Make you fall down like humpty dumpty.

C:
Naw nigga finish that steak so we can start-the-beef, I got the heart-to-speak.
I'm holding it down i'm my own man, i'ma heartless-beast.
i'm that dog that you dont want off-it's-leash, i'm so vicious i don't bark-I-eat.
But when I start-tah-speak, you know it's drama, i'ma just spark-that-heat.

V2:
Finish-The-Steak and Start-The-Beef//
Better be Fixin-Yo-mistake or I'll Spark-Ya-Teeth//
Cause I'm Fixin-To-Break, All You Dogs-In-Heat//
and By Dogs-In-Heat, I mean Holes in your lung Make It Hard-To-Breath//
Hold On, Let me add some Chicken-N-Biscuits//
Cause im about to Decinagrate-you-Mis-Fits//
Mind is going Ballistic from all you Infants//
This is not a Dissin-Track//
Just lettin you know how i make these Bitches-Stack//
I'm Quick-To-React, Get My Orders and im your place where my Missions-At//
Try to hit me with your Lame Come-Backs//
I'll Knock your Bottom Jaw Through your Rev-Run-Hat.

C:
Naw nigga finish that steak so we can start-the-beef, I got the heart-to-speak.
I'm holding it down i'm my own man, i'ma heartless-beast.
i'm that dog that you dont want off-it's-leash, i'm so vicious i don't bark-I-eat.
But when I start-tah-speak, you know it's drama, i'ma just spark-that-heat.

V3:
Finish the steak start-the-beef, just to let you know that we gots-tah-eat.
I'm tellin you now jus-dun-speak, If i hear any sounds i'ma pop-the-heat.
Lyrically my minds-the-clip my drops are the bullets.
Here-you-see When it's-time-tah-spit I ain't on no bullshit.
I'm here now before I aint wanna forfeit, so consider this my drop for the battle.
when you read this you'll be on the floor-stiff, from always trying to hop-on-my-sattle.
Little damn faggots always ridin-a-meat, no kinda life so they're strivin-for-beef.
Really I'm just trying-to-eat, I'm in a struggle because in-life-shit-aint-free.
In-time-this-may-be, where lifes-just-at-ease, And-I-just-will-see, that-i'm-definitely.
Gonna whipe-my-plate-clean, cause life-just-may-seem, Like-a-big-ass-dream.
But it ain't, so really if you got beef then handle it and be a man.
Messin wit' me you see i'll make yall scaredy's wet there pants.

C:
Naw nigga finish that steak so we can start-the-beef, I got the heart-to-speak.
I'm holding it down i'm my own man, i'ma heartless-beast.
i'm that dog that you dont want off-it's-leash, i'm so vicious i don't bark-I-eat.
But when I start-tah-speak, you know it's drama, i'ma just spark-that-heat.

Quit swinging like tarzan you feel me..give my nuts a break..
I mean shit get off my dick to while you at it. too many haters wanna hop on it...this ain't a rollercoaster

the rollercoaster part at the end was abit shit.
Leave that out.

To be honest, i liked this alot.
Showed alot of elevation here.
I liked the chorus, flowed well, your verses flowed moderately good.
Khan's verses flowed very well.
Im taking it this is written for audio.
All in all this was pretty good. Was rapping this to the grill'em beat by jr writer. Lol.

lol the rollercoaster part all that shit was just talkin'...and yeah i wanna do this audio dunno bout him though uppin for more feed...thanks

thanks for the FeedBack, i don't think this is going to audio on my part.
Reason being, I don't have a mic at this point in Time, But Soon.
I Will, Thanks Again on The FeedBack.

dude, i admit all ur efforts are beginning to show signs of a little spec of improvement,
but this isn't anything special though, its not something that could impress much, but coming from u i think this is a big step in the right direction, ur multis aren't that great, u been workin on them though cuz they improved too, and ur structure and flow needs more touching up,(and dont make the excuse that poetry doesn't have structure) but hey good job though kid, ur startin to sort of understand how this shit works. And reality check though dude, keep your pants on cuz if ur trying to direct this verse to anybody here it isn't true, E-Beef isnt hate at all, no body is dissing you on ur drops besides ur battles, which is the proper place to talk shit. You ask for help to elevate, people will give you tips, so dont get emotional, cuz we'll really clown on you for that. But then again if that motivates u then go ahead..

But really just keep trying until u find ur place and rhythm.

Keep it up.

Lol some shit was directed to people and some shit wasn't...it ain't a direct diss to anyone though....but yeah thanks for the feed...uppin for more feed yall

All of Khans verses were good
Phantom - Showed elevation and a good step in the right direction. What made you go from poems to rap verses?

Alright drop. Should be a good audio too.

Also, how come you had time to write this but you didnt have time to drop in our battle?

Because when i got free time u closed it so i said forget it....but yeah i been rappin...poetry is rappin in a sense....but thanks for the feed uppin for me...good or bad it dont matter...so wildbill what do you think my down falls were?

In your previous rap verses?

Being too corny.

But your BIGGEST downfall yet is not being able to take construct criticism. For example: random-shit-vt7494.html

They gave you criticism that it wasn't that good, you called them dickriders. That shit don't fly man. If you didn't want criticism you shouldn't be posting you stuff. THAT is your biggest downfall.

Well the dickrider thing was to viral...i dont get along with him or ekoms that much....but yeah i can take it...people have good and bad days you know

this wasnt to bad here, i thought khan outshined thephantom here, but both were good, i liked the chorus. it was a nice piece of improvement here, keep droppin and props, but both of you need to work on ya structures a bit

oook well out of all ur drops..dis is da best...ur actually usin multis that make sense n work decently...over all..id say both of yall did pretty good..havent seen khan n forever...so i cant say if hes improved..but phantom sure has...

n if im such a dick rider...explain to me....y u IMed me...talkin bout go leave me feed..luckily i aint got a damn thing to do...so im here......or wait..better yet...talkin bout how ur english 4 shit is so hard and its online...and den u send me a screen shot...like ima help u or somethin.....explain that to me.......till then...ur ridin ur own dick n must be wishin its me

keep droppin...quit hatin...n if u dont get along wit me like u claim...den y u always IMing me for help wit ur pc n wat da fuck not....ur pushin a beef dat doesnt care to exsist..

i aint trying to start beef..and yeah i im you..duh? i cant stand yall sometimes.......but this english 4 is hard as fuck i aint learned shit at all my whole years in highschool.....but thanks for the feed....and uppin for me...if you want to help me out any im down for some help...just message me or start a thread to help me i dont care....