I Can See Through The Smoke...

Omega Bill · Post by **Omega Bill** » Wed Feb 20, 2008 9:33 am

Takes 5 months to drop, like a red lighted stop again task
And a fake MC Ive sighted, hes gonna be needin an oxygen mask
Cause fillin up your lungs and organs will leave ya chest pushin and compress
Your lyrics make me sick an give me a heave test when you lookin to impress
E-thug spittin fast couldnt catch up with the beat, kid doing that ya burned yaself
Boy you wouldnt hit nobody with some heat, what you just did was turned ya shelf
Went from top to bottom, being good at audios to nothin but a frontin cut peasant
"How can we stop em" remind him hes white and he couldnt hit it if it was nothin but resin
I can see through the smoke, Ill wreck your wind pipe cant breathe when you choke
Rhymes are weaker than most, and ya beats got less jump then east of the coast
Cant step to us was a joke, Id walk right into your house and take a shit on your welcome mat
Smack your scrawny ass around a little bit to teach you a lesson so I wouldnt hafta come back
The hate and disses homie, I welcome it, and the blunts you talk about I know you seldom hit
So next time someone wanna diss me, tell them this, Ill always respond, cus I aint scared of a meltin bitch

Fire.

Quick little structured freestyle.

thaphantom · Post by **thaphantom** » Wed Feb 20, 2008 9:45 am

i think you're in over your head lyrically....these guys will murder you...there audio's may be shitty.....but there lyrically good....other then that it wasnt bad..... had no fav lines....some funny shit in there though..

Arvincible · Post by **Arvincible** » Wed Feb 20, 2008 11:07 am

wtf i want to ban you for having such terrible opinions in everything that has to do with this site.^^^
U should stick to working on ur middle school english.

Anyways bill this mess is a big step from sucking to not sucking so bad.

I can see through the smoke, Ill wreck your wind pipe cant breathe when you choke
Rhymes are weaker than most, and ya beats got less jump then east of the coast

that was the best you had lol

keep it up ur only gonna improve if you keep goin

thaphantom · Post by **thaphantom** » Wed Feb 20, 2008 11:46 am

why are you hating so much and i aint in middle school english dumb fuck shut da hell up....anyways

Cee4 · Post by **Cee4** » Wed Feb 20, 2008 11:49 am

this was alright. ur structure and flow is improving a lot. ur multis have come a long way too. i know i never got round to helping u with multis but the best way to learn is by doing it yourself. when i came to this site i didnt know what a bar or a multi was. but by just battling and reading other peoples drops u can pick it up pretty quickly which u have done. i think this piece was missing a couple of dope punchlines. they would have improved this diss alot. but yeah keep dropping and dont stop battiling. coz if u want to improve then thats the best way in my opinion coz when i came here i just battled and battled til i thought i was half decent. i never even dropped in the scriptures until after about 3 or 4 months from joining illest. blah blah lol

Omega Bill · Post by **Omega Bill** » Wed Feb 20, 2008 11:54 am

lol, thanks Cee. Yeah I aint gonna quit battling, I just have writers block sometimes and I clam up during battles so I wanna work on some drops in here first so I can actually win some, hahaha.

Thanks for all the feed guys.

Ambiguous Realm · Post by **Ambiguous Realm** » Thu Feb 21, 2008 12:44 am

lol at first i thought this was towards me cuz of the title... but afterwards... i dunno ..im assuming its just randomly done.. to no one but yea.. overall it seemed like one of ur best dropped so far including battle verses and other scripture drops

Khan · Post by **Khan** » Thu Feb 21, 2008 1:45 am

well i liked your openin line alot, came out strong, might not have stayed that strong all the way through, but hey fuck it, shit was good, Good Job Bill.

thaphantom · Post by **thaphantom** » Thu Feb 21, 2008 2:01 am

ekoms it was directed to either you or viral in some parts.... but like they said from what i read of u before u have improved...and also it did come off strong i know i left feed before..but just leaving more cause i know you're checking over it..but leave some feed on my post in scriptures

-TraMaTiK- · Post by **-TraMaTiK-** » Thu Feb 21, 2008 3:26 am

why iz this kid in like every thread^?newayz bill this was decent,definetly a step from what u previously dropped not much 2 say except keep writin n dont stop as others above stated,u gotta find ur 'zone' so 2 speak n stick with it,ull get there in time keep it up

~Symbolikull~ · Post by **~Symbolikull~** » Thu Feb 21, 2008 3:30 am

tramatik said everything i was goin to, thought this was ur strongest piece to date, so keep elevatin kid

thaphantom · Post by **thaphantom** » Thu Feb 21, 2008 4:41 am

i can comment threads cant I? and i told him it was good... i aint hate on him to the fullest...but anyways i'm sure he's uppin for more feed

Haz · Post by **Haz** » Thu Feb 21, 2008 4:57 am

Cant step to us was a joke, <--- He wus Dissin u Ekoms LoL.

thaphantom · Post by **thaphantom** » Thu Feb 21, 2008 5:01 am

yeah thats what i had thought....hazard go post some feed on my newest drops in scipts

Omega Bill · Post by **Omega Bill** » Thu Feb 21, 2008 10:30 am

It's not a "diss" towards Ekoms like the last one was. Just a response to what he said about me in "War On Illest" had to respond, come on now, hahaha.

Thanks for all the feed guys.

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