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brendas gotta baby?

Posted: Mon Feb 25, 2008 6:46 am
by -TraMaTiK-
heres somethin i wuz workin on for the hell of it in my spare time,its basically my version of brendas gotta baby,i mighttt record it,dependin on how ppl like it and whatnot,so leave feed n whatever u feel ill return it as always

i heard she hit the streets at a young age
where the killaz n thugs always swung blades
still a child herself learnin ta grow
her boyfriend always burnin some dro
curiousity musta got the best a her
but sadly fate took the rest a her
when it comes ta parents she never knew em
so its apparent she wuz thinkin screw em
her boyfriend kept her up so restless
the hard times really left her breathless
she thought everything wuz changin
she wud be happy no more pain n
that day she wud go see her cousin
not realizin her boyfriend was him
all smilin n kept laughin but see
he found out she's havin his seed
she went and spread her legs
now everyone thinks she be better dead
cryin crawlin fallin with a fetus
nobody heard her callin 4 jesus
so scared n alone what did she do
took a blanket n wrapped her kid up too
slowly made her way 2 the dumpster
took once last glance cried n dumped her
with tears in her eyes she finally noticed
the blurry picture of life iz in focus
she knew what she did wuz real krazy
she went back n had'ta save her baby
but now even her family disownin her
so these streets really became home'ta her
eventually her soul wuz yellin 4 help
needed money so she tried sellin her self
the sad thing iz it didnt work at all
she wuz left beat in the dirt ta fall
got no where ta run no where ta stay
but her family dont even care ta day
so now makin money aint an option
wonderin where jesus iz he cud pop in
and see this society its krazy
brendas her name she's gotta baby..

Posted: Mon Feb 25, 2008 6:52 am
by complexity
Man, i forgot how depressing that song was. Lol.

This was good though.

I'd record in audio, if for no other reason besides to add to your catalog of songs.

"cryin crawlin fallin with a fetus
nobody heard her callin 4 jesus"

You would need another verse though, in my opinion.

It seems to get to the end a little bit to quick.

I would have liked more background on the situation.

It's like, boyfriend, sex, throw baby, prostitute, and over. Damn, i knew life was quick!

Posted: Mon Feb 25, 2008 7:00 am
by -TraMaTiK-
yea plex the instrumental i got has everything except pac's part in it,so i wrote from the begining till those singers kick in again and it fits perfect so idk bout a 2nd verse but thanks 4 the feed and lol@damn i knew life was quick

Posted: Mon Feb 25, 2008 7:02 am
by thaphantom
Yo good shit...aye you got the beat for it? i'd drop on the track if you wanted.... Good though..i want to hear u spit this to a beat...you gonna use the same chrous he uses?

Posted: Mon Feb 25, 2008 7:05 am
by complexity
Well, how about, what happens to brenda now?

"brenda don't have a baby
maybe it's for the best, brenda was kinda crazy
brenda tried to kill herself
thought she fucked her life up"

Something like that, just an idea.

It doesn't matter. And I meant, "if for no other reason"

Posted: Mon Feb 25, 2008 7:13 am
by -TraMaTiK-
thaphantom wrote:.you gonna use the same chrous he uses?
^yea its the same exact beat n same singers n everything just 2pac's part iz taken out obviously

and plex i hear u there i prollyyy cudda went more in depth n added that but i finished it about an hr ago n wuz satisfied so i said fuck it lol

Posted: Mon Feb 25, 2008 7:15 am
by thaphantom
I dunno how good my recordings will be on this computer....upload da beat so i can listen to it...i want to hear how it sounds with ya ryhme

Posted: Mon Feb 25, 2008 2:43 pm
by Borat
i would like to hear this recorded... very much so...

Posted: Mon Feb 25, 2008 2:53 pm
by Glamtrash
Indeed. Do it up.

Posted: Mon Feb 25, 2008 3:10 pm
by Arvincible
yea its audio worthy my friend

It'd be a tight remix lol


but now even her family disownin her
so these streets really became home'ta her
eventually her soul wuz yellin 4 help
needed money so she tried sellin her self

the best part to me ^^


Return the favor please.

Posted: Tue Feb 26, 2008 1:36 am
by Omega Bill
Dope shit. Definetley audio worthy.

Liked the whole thing

cryin crawlin fallin with a fetus
nobody heard her callin 4 jesus

Loved that part man. Liked the whole damn thing actually, haha.

Can't wait for the audio.

Posted: Tue Feb 26, 2008 2:09 am
by -TraMaTiK-
yupp..its all recorded tho lol

Posted: Tue Feb 26, 2008 3:41 pm
by ~Symbolikull~
i left feed on the audio one man, and i read the lyrics along wit the song on soundclick, shit was dope, deep and fulla emotions, jus need to get that presence on the mic man

Posted: Tue Feb 26, 2008 3:46 pm
by -TraMaTiK-
good looks^

Posted: Tue Feb 26, 2008 4:53 pm
by Brah-Vo
Felt the emotion on this shit.
Overall a nice piece.
Deffo should record this.
Better then usual tram.
keep up my dude.