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Everyday its like im on the move, searchin, my missions,
Is to always keep pushin, its like im workin the systems,
Findin ppl that have some good in the person within em,
Keep my head up, stay strong that's the worth in me livin,
Sometimes it gets to hard n it feels like earth is a prison,
Its my speech it cant be contained like words ina prism,
Im back spittin wit heat leave u runts burnt in position,
Learnin precision instantaneously I Further my writtens,
Never stop continuous spit like the thirst is quenched when,
I cant be seen on the scene but yall the first in my vision,
Composing to oppose me is prolly the worst of decisions,
I could be bush in the flesh or another version of Nixon,
I hit in inches, to close to measure when ur hurt in the distance,
I created the particles that created our burst in existence,
The new versions in scripted no need for a church or religion,
And im not sayin im god, I jus speak truth in my verses so listen,
I live day to day to bad, its like im the one who serves what u wishin,
Pessimistic bastards are so blind, like they've never heard optimism,
I murk competition, turn opposition into words as I exurt compositions,
I like to earn what im getting, keep it calm rarely cursin in writtens,
& certain decisions get u caught up succumbed by worthless addictions,
Get better, heal from the pain then do it again like a circular system…

Sometimes it gets to hard n it feels like earth is a prison, < Feelin Dis line alot
Its my speech it cant be contained like words ina prism,
Im back spittin wit heat leave u runts burnt in position, < Dis whole shit u went sic
Learnin precision instantaneously I Further my writtens,
^ LoL Like da BIG WORD


I murk competition, turn opposition into words as I exurt compositions,
I like to earn what im getting, keep it calm rarely cursin in writtens,
& certain decisions get u caught up succumbed by worthless addictions, <<<<daamn . LoL u Went on fire rite Dere

ya Verse Wus laced Wid Metaphors & jus fire Multis.
u Killed ya Flow Like Dat..

Good Drop u Bastard,

Keep Droppin

Dopest shit I have read from you in a while.

"Is to always keep pushin, its like im workin the systems,
Findin ppl that have some good in the person within em,
Keep my head up, stay strong that's the worth in me livin,
Sometimes it gets to hard n it feels like earth is a prison, "

"certain decisions get u caught up succumbed by worthless addictions,
Get better, heal from the pain then do it again like a circular system…"

Favorite parts.

I also like this...

"I hit in inches, to close to measure when ur hurt in the distance,
I created the particles that created our burst in existence, "

But wouldn't it be our burst into existence?

And if you're going to say, no, then please explain it further to me. Because that line means nothing to me as the way it is.

A few bars seemed like rambling, I know, you like to be very detailed but that rarely curse in a written line because i stay calm is just pointless line, in my opinion.

The vocabulary was great. The flow was nice. No really corny shit. 85 percent of it made sense at first glance.

9.0/10.

thanx for the feed guys... appreciate the break down plex

man plex lol i wuz gonna break it down but whatever,i liked these lines tho man

I cant be seen on the scene but yall the first in my vision,
Composing to oppose me is prolly the worst of decisions,
I could be bush in the flesh or another version of Nixon,
I hit in inches, to close to measure when ur hurt in the distance

hot^,overall this drop wuz nice as hell but that just stood out 2 me for some reason,attention grabber in'a way,good shit tho man glad i can read somethin else INTERESTING besides plex n shit,keep droppin

appreciate the feed homie

Probably My NEW favo Drop From Ya
Overall a real consistent piece.
Dope up down left right and center.
Flow was nice fa me,
Vocab was top notch as usual
I like ya style man.
KEEP DROPPING
Peace.

I like longer pieces, so my feeds gonna break it all down.


Sometimes it gets to hard n it feels like earth is a prison,
Its my speech it cant be contained like words ina prism,
Im back spittin wit heat leave u runts burnt in position,
Learnin precision instantaneously I Further my writtens,


Nice, really liked the fact that you didn't dumb down any vocab here, the bigger words pushed the flow and kept me interested and let me you know you weren't playing around.


Never stop continuous spit like the thirst is quenched when,
I cant be seen on the scene but yall the first in my vision,
Composing to oppose me is prolly the worst of decisions,
I could be bush in the flesh or another version of Nixon,


Gettin historical? Haha. Usually mentioning a president or a dead president could potentailly make people be like "What the hells this dude talkin about". Liked that part, but it kinda seemed out of place for me.


I hit in inches, to close to measure when ur hurt in the distance,
I created the particles that created our burst in existence,


Oooo nice. Liked the hit in inches and flowed into can be hurt into a distance, and creating particles and using a word such as burst to give the reader imagery, it's not like someone saying "blow up", everyones knows that blowing up looks like, but burst adds a lot of imagery to it.


I murk competition, turn opposition into words as I exurt compositions,
I like to earn what im getting, keep it calm rarely cursin in writtens,

Another good point. Goes to show you don't gotta drop a curse word in every piece if you're a good enough writer. You can go through a whole drop without using a single curse word, even in disses, because when you have a broad vocabulary bigger words and words with more thought put into them cut a lot deeper than the typical "suck on this".


& certain decisions get u caught up succumbed by worthless addictions,
Get better, heal from the pain then do it again like a circular system…


What that part says to me is basically an indirect quote of "History always repeats itself". Druggies quit, go back at it, people quit smoking, get better, start doing it again. Basically the circle of life and you brought it to attention in that bar.


Very nice drop. Best I've seen from you in awhile. I like longer pieces, like I said, haha.

It wasn't long as in..number of bars, per se.
It was actually quite short.
It was long in a way that the vocabulary was so advanced that it was abit exhausting to read because you're taking alot in.
That's what a true piece is.
A piece that makes you think, and leaves u tired at the end.

it was 11 bars, kinda long but not really compared to some of the other pieces ive dropped round here...

thanx for the feed though but mos def still UPPIN more

What Stood Out The Most To Me in This Was The Multis And Similes. Structure Was Nice, Especially The Way u Delivered The Topic. Pretty Basic Topic So it Definitely Needed The Multis, Similes And imagery To Spice it Up.

a Few Lines Went Off The Subject But Overall it Was a Solid Verse, it All Flowed Together And u Made a Potentially Boring Drop into Quite a Good Read. Probably Not The Best ive Read From u But Still Dope, Keep Dropping.

thanx my dude i appreciate it

UppIN

I murk competition, turn opposition into words as I exurt compositions,
I like to earn what im getting, keep it calm rarely cursin in writtens,
& certain decisions get u caught up succumbed by worthless addictions,
Get better, heal from the pain then do it again like a circular system…

this was nice, of course everything was on point as usual ,what i dont understand if the concept it was like it went from being about life and all that good then it went to how good u write then back to life concepts?

this was really good tho, just seemed a little random to me

"I murk competition, turn opposition into words as I exurt compositions, "

That line was dope, unfortunately the follow up that should have brought it home sucked.

good drop homie...i liked it..