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Posted: Thu Feb 28, 2008 1:46 am
by thaphantom
outa curiosity....what was this a freestyle somethin for a verse a poem what? But it was pretty decent...Liked the concept of it "Why"
Posted: Thu Feb 28, 2008 4:16 am
by ~Symbolikull~
i think you coulda did more to this to make it more appealin, but it was a good lil short bro the first 2 bars were the best i thought
Posted: Thu Feb 28, 2008 7:16 am
by Arvincible
ThatGuyYouHate wrote:
Why i Have Ta Put My Pen Ta Tha Page
Why is Death Always Tha End Of Tha Days
Why Niggaz Smokin Crack An Sniffin Powder
Why Tha Planes Have Ta Hit Them Towers
Why Nana Give Up When Life Was Almost Over
Why Does it Feel Like i'm Drunk When i'm Really Sober
Why Cant i Win And Just Strike it Rich
Why Am i Even Writin This?
those were the best lines which was basically half of the drop, good stuff
these were really interesting quesitons to ask yourself lol
its not that theyre new or anything but you put it together real well
Why Does This Life Keep Gettin Me High
Why Does This Fight Keep Gettin Me By
this line kinda reminded me of kadaf's line in tupac's hail mary...idk just wanted to say that lol
Good shit bruh keep it comin
Posted: Thu Feb 28, 2008 2:42 pm
by -TraMaTiK-
Why i Have Ta Put My Pen Ta Tha Page
Why is Death Always Tha End Of Tha Days
Why Niggaz Smokin Crack An Sniffin Powder
Why Tha Planes Have Ta Hit Them Towers
Why Tha Fedz Have Ta Hit That Stake
Why Aint My Homies Get That Break
my fav part^,yo son u shud write the full verses n record it 2,just 4 fun ya kno,but flow wuz clean didnt seem forced newhere,write some more 4 this man
Posted: Fri Feb 29, 2008 6:31 am
by Momeijah
Lol Qual.
Consistent Flow And Multis Throughout, Good Points Raised Although Maybe The Subjects Changed Abruptly at Some Parts, Donno. Dope Piece Though Especially The Last Bar.
Why Does it Feel Like i'm Drunk When i'm Really Sober
Why Does This Life Keep Gettin Me High
Why Does This Fight Keep Gettin Me By
Why Cant i Win And Just Strike it Rich
Why Am i Even Writin This?
Favourite Part. ^ interesting Perception.
Posted: Fri Feb 29, 2008 11:46 am
by Haz
Why i Have Ta Put My Pen Ta Tha Page
Why is Death Always Tha End Of Tha Days <<< Deepest Line in Da Piece
Good Piece Nice Seein You Use Jada's Concept & Goin Good Wid ya Flow & Multis
Why you Write it So Short? LOL
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