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aint earnin-the-right to take a turn in a fight
Aint Burnin the site you'll be squirmin tonite
the mad Scientist here 2 pick u apart
Put this Worm-in-the-light


This guy is ona desktop alot He can Make a File call me lox Call Him Koch Cause hes Tryna (TAKE MY STYLE)
u Fresh meat in a Lake of diles & you beeen Sneekin Around tryna Step u Can be SNAKE OF MILES!

People Say if u smoke weed ur Creativity will Spazz son u say u smoke erday & u still ain HAVE NONE!
Ya Punchline Title wus branchin off beef like where CAVS FROM a cooked Recipe Wen HAZ DONE.

this cat couldnt bubble a good creation AZ CUM cus he on his "Loon-E" Shit just Like TAZZ DUN
He Froggy like the Maskot of Honey Smack he can pose like a asshole Still wont call da "DUMMIE CRACK"

Fuc Garfield i gotta Shank-Dat-Cat-Man & havin um dancin off like im playin Crank-Dat-Bat-Man
Cee say he gota model O u gotta "Skank Datz Fat Dam" dont get Hype-o & Tell ha dont get-Lip-o

So u can really have Weight on u & say u got Drug Deala STRIPEZ YO! Fruity Fuck u RIPE BRO
im Further Den u like u Nine & ima Snipe So Gooo To Haz Rehab & Let My PIPE GO!!

You Said the Voters in are battle as a BUNCH SUCKD dats Why TheGuy Had u LUNCHD ..FUCK?
dawg u just Slayin-Ya-Self i Know Males gotta Instrument And u Needa Stop PLAYIN YA SELF!!!!!

u Aint Makin "MUS-iCK" he bin thru More hoes Den wata So he Strtin To (OOZ-SICK)
its Killing Him he cant kill a verse but can Kill a bottle So he Relyz on BOOZ..PRICK!

i'll Throw u in da Port off Da Bridge Cus u "Shakey on ya info" Like u made a Report Off-a-Ridge
u Aint a Crook Shit u Greezy? Everythings Hidden About da City cus Crook-it-Fa-Breezey

Readin ya Bullshit?? No im Chillin im Good its like u Focused on Da Engine u dont know about da HOOD
Chargerz Got Niggahz Sneeekin ya people Ata High Rate of Stupid dem Figgahz Tweekin


aint earnin-the-right to take a turn in a fight
Aint Burnin the site you'll be squirmin tonite
the mad Scientist here 2 pick u apart
Put this Worm-in-the-light



See theres a time u turn into a man but this nigga Turn to a bitch while Dick Turn to his Hand
u Tryna Get "Hard" & Ain concerned Wid a Pan u'll get the Same "Check up" u Earn wid a plan

i'll Expose u Ain Sick & i Highly Persume u Da type 2 Write Rapz with Bill O Righly-In-Tune
thinkin of how to be ra-cist this race-its not in ya handz u got no jewelz but gota spot in ya band

Guitars & Tea im "Spottin ya Band" The only Royalty u Be Around u Got In a (Hand)
so Picture where u wanna be "Ur jottin a land" Knowin u'll Be a Bum & ( Rott in a Damn)

Movin in Wid Beavers, u got Nothin Bright-a-Head u Bein Gassed up i Kno ya Lighta Fed
u a Ghost writin u gotta site the dead like dynamite tulips i'll Ignite-ya-Bed

i'll Pick um Apart Gut fa Gut since its like i Took Viagra i Cant get Dis NUT TA SHUT!
u a Lion? Scar Naaah u Ain Nothin But-a-Cut Who'll Ran Thru Like Butt-a-MUT


The Only Hazard u Ate Stay in sum Dishes throw On a Neno & go Lay in Wid Fishes

Fuck outta hea Nigggah
no More, u Aint On My Level Maan Go Bitch About a Battle or Somethin ( Haha)

Best bars

Fuc Garfield i gotta Shank-Dat-Cat-Man & havin um dancin off like im playin Crank-Dat-Bat-Man
Cee say he gota model O u gotta "Skank Datz Fat Dam" dont get Hype-o & Tell ha dont get-Lip-o

^^Nice punch, flowed well, crank dat bat man shouldnt have been there though, lol. Good finish to that though.

You Said the Voters in are battle as a BUNCH SUCKD dats Why TheGuy Had u LUNCHD ..FUCK?
dawg u just Slayin-Ya-Self i Know Males gotta Instrument And u Needa Stop PLAYIN YA SELF!!!!!

^^ Laughed out loud

See theres a time u turn into a man but this nigga Turn to a bitch while Dick Turn to his Hand
u Tryna Get "Hard" & Ain concerned Wid a Pan u'll get the Same "Check up" u Earn wid a plan

^^Good wordplay, Check up you earn wid a plan was put together tight.

i'll Expose u Ain Sick & i Highly Persume u Da type 2 Write Rapz with Bill O Righly-In-Tune
thinkin of how to be ra-cist this race-its not in ya handz

^^^Aye you had a really good opener for this line but I think you finished it sloppy. Coulda been the best bar in the whole drop how you opened this one.

Guitars & Tea im "Spottin ya Band" The only Royalty u Be Around u Got In a (Hand)
so Picture where u wanna be "Ur jottin a land" Knowin u'll Be a Bum & ( Rott in a Damn)
Movin in Wid Beavers, u got Nothin Bright-a-Head u Bein Gassed up i Kno ya Lighta Fed
u a Ghost writin u gotta site the dead like dynamite tulips i'll Ignite-ya-Bed

^^Favorite bars in the whole piece.

The bars that hit hit really hard, some bars didnt seem to really hit. Bars are listed are really well done, good shit all around. Some seemed to miss though, like they coulda been incorporated better into the flow of things. I also couldnt really tell who you were dissin either some parts sound like Cee4 some sound like Domino. Or was the first half Cee and the 2nd half Dom? Cause that's what it looks like, lol.

lol Wusnt Dissin Dom At All

Dis is a Strictly Fuck Cee4 Piece

This guy is ona desktop alot He can Make a File call me lox Call Him Koch Cause hes Tryna (TAKE MY STYLE)
u Fresh meat in a Lake of diles & you beeen Sneekin Around tryna Step u Can be SNAKE OF MILES!
Good wordplay. I don't see how im tryna take your style tho

People Say if u smoke weed ur Creativity will Spazz son u say u smoke erday & u still ain HAVE NONE!
Ya Punchline Title wus branchin off beef like where CAVS FROM a cooked Recipe Wen HAZ DONE.
Good flow here. The first line was better than the second. Yeah I smoke weed but ive never said I smoke it every day

this cat couldnt bubble a good creation AZ CUM cus he on his "Loon-E" Shit just Like TAZZ DUN
He Froggy like the Maskot of Honey Smack he can pose like a asshole Still wont call da "DUMMIE CRACK"
dope. the best bar of the verse. Great wordplay. The loon E shit was funny. Good shit

Fuc Garfield i gotta Shank-Dat-Cat-Man & havin um dancin off like im playin Crank-Dat-Bat-Man
Cee say he gota model O u gotta "Skank Datz Fat Dam" dont get Hype-o & Tell ha dont get-Lip-o
didn't like this bar. More cartoon references is only showing your mental age

So u can really have Weight on u & say u got Drug Deala STRIPEZ YO! Fruity Fuck u RIPE BRO
im Further Den u like u Nine & ima Snipe So Gooo To Haz Rehab & Let My PIPE GO!!
Nice flow again. decent punch

You Said the Voters in are battle as a BUNCH SUCKD dats Why TheGuy Had u LUNCHD ..FUCK?
dawg u just Slayin-Ya-Self i Know Males gotta Instrument And u Needa Stop PLAYIN YA SELF!!!!!
First line was wack. The second line was funny. Good wordplay/punch

u Aint Makin "MUS-iCK" he bin thru More hoes Den wata So he Strtin To (OOZ-SICK)
its Killing Him he cant kill a verse but can Kill a bottle So he Relyz on BOOZ..PRICK!
This sounded forced as fuck. And your damn right I`ll kill a bottle of booze

i'll Throw u in da Port off Da Bridge Cus u "Shakey on ya info" Like u made a Report Off-a-Ridge
u Aint a Crook Shit u Greezy? Everythings Hidden About da City cus Crook-it-Fa-Breezey
First line was OK. Shakey on my info? Stop goin on about how hard Bridgeport is. Yeah it was hard about 20 years ago but it aint now so stop fronting.
Second line was forced and wack

Readin ya Bullshit?? No im Chillin im Good its like u Focused on Da Engine u dont know about da HOOD
Chargerz Got Niggahz Sneeekin ya people Ata High Rate of Stupid dem Figgahz Tweekin
This was alrite. The first line was better than second. Nice flow.

See theres a time u turn into a man but this nigga Turn to a bitch while Dick Turn to his Hand
u Tryna Get "Hard" & Ain concerned Wid a Pan u'll get the Same "Check up" u Earn wid a plan
didn't like anything about this bar

i'll Expose u Ain Sick & i Highly Persume u Da type 2 Write Rapz with Bill O Righly-In-Tune
thinkin of how to be ra-cist this race-its not in ya handz u got no jewelz but gota spot in ya band
This was alrite. Yeah ive made racist jokes. If u cant takethe heat then stay out the kitchen

Guitars & Tea im "Spottin ya Band" The only Royalty u Be Around u Got In a (Hand)
so Picture where u wanna be "Ur jottin a land" Knowin u'll Be a Bum & ( Rott in a Damn)
Nice wordplay. The stereotypical tea shit is mildly amusing. I dunno what the guitar shit is about. Are u dissing Domino here coz ive never played a guitar in my life?

Movin in Wid Beavers, u got Nothin Bright-a-Head u Bein Gassed up i Kno ya Lighta Fed
u a Ghost writin u gotta site the dead like dynamite tulips i'll Ignite-ya-Bed
I liked this bar. Good wordplay. Nice punch

i'll Pick um Apart Gut fa Gut since its like i Took Viagra i Cant get Dis NUT TA SHUT!
u a Lion? Scar Naaah u Ain Nothin But-a-Cut Who'll Ran Thru Like Butt-a-MUT
First line was OK. don't know what the fuck the second line is about

The Only Hazard u Ate Stay in sum Dishes throw On a Neno & go Lay in Wid Fishes
Neno jokes are played out big time my friend

overall the verse was decent. Nothing special. On the whole the flow was good. Decent multis although there were a few forced ones. You had some nice punches but honestly they were not as hard as usual.Like Bill said some hit and some missed. Your style of writing made it hard to follow. If you have some sort of learning difficulty then im sorry but if u wrote your bars in English they would be a lot easier to read. You never really had any personals that hit hard here. I dunno if you were focusing on wordplay and punch lines but I didn't see anything in that verse that hurt me. So yeah keep dropping. I don't know if you think this is some kind of e beef or not but I don't have any hate for you. This is just a bit of fun. I hope it's the same for you. I cant say your wack coz ur not. You do have skills. You would probably get into my top 10 on Illest at the moment.

man Quit Talkin Bout My City if u Ain Eva Bin here Fuckin Faggot
& Jump Off My Dick .,. Fuck Ya Feed Nigga..

People Say if u smoke weed ur Creativity will Spazz son u say u smoke erday & u still ain HAVE NONE!
Ya Punchline Title wus branchin off beef like where CAVS FROM a cooked Recipe Wen HAZ DONE.

lol wooow


So u can really have Weight on u & say u got Drug Deala STRIPEZ YO! Fruity Fuck u RIPE BRO
im Further Den u like u Nine & ima Snipe So Gooo To Haz Rehab & Let My PIPE GO!!

That was greatt^^


Guitars & Tea im "Spottin ya Band" The only Royalty u Be Around u Got In a (Hand)
so Picture where u wanna be "Ur jottin a land" Knowin u'll Be a Bum & ( Rott in a Damn)

lol that was great wordplay^^


this was a great punchline filled drop mang

Idk what u two are doing but cee doesnt take it as beef and ur going all crazy on him!! lol

Keep it comin..ur on my fave 5 in the fight club if u check it up

Thanks For The Feed My People


Uppin 4 Feed

we are not ur people! lol jk i had to say it, could help it.

Don't Have Time For Bar For Bar...But After Reading This I Noticed A Couple Negatives And A Few Positives. The Two Negatives Were The Bars Were A Little Streched, And A Few Too Many Fillers. Although You Did Pack Some Punches, And Had Some Good Wordplay Within Your Verse. Some Of Them Had Illy Concepts, That You Could Have Polished Up Into Something Extra Sick. The Hook Was Cool And Was Slick, But It Could Have Been Changed Up Some.... Overalll Good

Feed Please!!

good shit man... you got some good punches and good creativity... props

Y does Cee feed U back when this whole piece is a huge diss to him?? lmfao

i Dunno
I Leave Him Feed 2.
We Aint Sour bout The Lil Back & Forth Shit


& Provoked u Pussy ass Bitch.. Shut ya Ass up Niggah..
We Can Get a 4 On 4 Eazi Or a One on One ( Me N u ) lets get it