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Those of you that know me probably recognize this...

Anyways here it is...

Pt 1
His soul is alive but screamin and pleadin to die!
Consciously watchin all as the Demons just eat it inside!
Losing all control as evil thoughts breed in his mind
Beggin for help with his chest heavin he breathes at the sky
The job was too hard but he thought he could take it
But before entering he didn't even ask God if he'd make it
With no prayers the slayer was bein killed by the hunted
Holds up the cross and screams but his will has been shunted
But with no hope he just groped for a chance of survival
He turned around and he found his only answer the bible
able to learn the tables were turned he was lost in the moment
He'd finally learned the secret that would cost his opponent...


Pt 2
One look at the good book all it took to get his spirits uplifted
A change of gears in his mind you could hear it get shifted
It was clear he was gifted his eyes shined with devine power
Lord said, "Send the demon to Hell but first grind it to fine powder"
He stepped out of his body, takin the fight to the astral fields
Lord said "I'll lend you some of my might till the bastard yields"
So then he projected his image placing a sword in his hand
And his mind sped up in it's racing making up more of a plan
"I fear no mortal that stands", the Demon said laughin
then it looked in his eyes turned to run screamin and trashin!
raised from the sheath, blazin in heat the sword tore through the demon
cut the cords that were screamin so much blood poured it was streamin
A portal that no mortal had ever seen opened up in the room
As the fire burned the demon it's body smokin up in it's doom
the slayer said a prayer thanked the lord for aiding his struggle
"Be well my son" said the voice from a light contained in a bubble
the sword vanished the demon was banished a good night for the light side
Eternally humble the man was stuck fightin some slight pride
the body was taken exhausted the man made the return to his own
Grateful amazed and in a daze the job was done he turned to go home

It was clear he was gifted his eyes shined with devine power
Lord said, "Send the demon to Hell but first grind it to fine powder"

^ Liked this

So then he projected his image placing a sword in his hand
And his mind sped up in it's racing making up more of a plan < ill



A portal that no mortal had ever seen opened up in the room
As the fire burned the demon it's body smokin up in it's doom
the slayer said a prayer thanked the lord for aiding his struggle
"Be well my son" said the voice from a light contained in a bubble < LoL u got mad into Dis "Demon" shit
its Cool how you Stayed On Concept & just Flowed it out.. Few Multis Here & Dere


the body was taken exhausted the man made the return to his own
Grateful amazed and in a daze the job was done he turned to go home < Coulda had a More Solid finisher

but Yo Dis wus Deep in Some Sense & it Wus just weird & Caught My Attention In Another Sense

i Liked it you Stayed Wid Flow.. Made ya Point.. Stayed on Concept.. Put this Demon into Different Perspectives... Ur Not new To illest huh lol . O well

Stay Up & Stay Active

Lol... yeah, I'm not very new to this thanks for the feed man... good lookin...

Hate when people leave detailed feed before I do. Cause all the quoteables are taken and I look like a douche repeating what someone else said. FUCK YOU HAZ! haha.

Something Haz didnt mention though:
His soul is alive but screamin and pleadin to die!
Consciously watchin all as the Demons just eat it inside!
Losing all control as evil thoughts breed in his mind
Beggin for help with his chest heavin he breathes at the sky
The job was too hard but he thought he could take it
But before entering he didn't even ask God if he'd make it

Loved that part man. Multis were nice, flow was on point, descriptive. The whole piece was real nice. Flow didnt fall off, creative and actually an original piece, don't see too many pieces like this, good to see someone branching out from the norm.

Stayed on the concept the whole time, flowed the whole time, multis through-out, good imagery, as said before quite descriptive.

Liked this drop a lot. Stay active man, we need more heads like you round here.

aye who gives a fuck if ppl break it down b4,@least ppl doin it now right?lool so heres my lil break down since i got time,lemme say first off,i like ur flow its pretty clean

Pt 1
His soul is alive but screamin and pleadin to die!
Consciously watchin all as the Demons just eat it inside!
Losing all control as evil thoughts breed in his mind
Beggin for help with his chest heavin he breathes at the sky

pretty nice multis there^,cudda added some inner ones but its str8

The job was too hard but he thought he could take it
But before entering he didn't even ask God if he'd make it
With no prayers the slayer was bein killed by the hunted
Holds up the cross and screams but his will has been shunted

this part here wuz good but i think u cudda been a bit more descriptive like the last line 'holds up the cross with fear,etc' justa suggestion

But with no hope he just groped for a chance of survival
He turned around and he found his only answer the bible
able to learn the tables were turned he was lost in the moment
He'd finally learned the secret that would cost his opponent...

didnt really have a prob with that^pretty cool

first verse:pretty decent liked it for the most part

Pt 2
One look at the good book all it took to get his spirits uplifted
A change of gears in his mind you could hear it get shifted
It was clear he was gifted his eyes shined with devine power
Lord said, "Send the demon to Hell but first grind it to fine powder"

like that^good shit

He stepped out of his body, takin the fight to the astral fields
Lord said "I'll lend you some of my might till the bastard yields"
So then he projected his image placing a sword in his hand
And his mind sped up in it's racing making up more of a plan

now its really pickin up by the time these bars hit^gettin better

"I fear no mortal that stands", the Demon said laughin
then it looked in his eyes turned to run screamin and trashin!
raised from the sheath, blazin in heat the sword tore through the demon
cut the cords that were screamin so much blood poured it was streamin

nice describin shit^now if only u cud do that more in the 1st verse

A portal that no mortal had ever seen opened up in the room
As the fire burned the demon it's body smokin up in it's doom
the slayer said a prayer thanked the lord for aiding his struggle
"Be well my son" said the voice from a light contained in a bubble

i can feel the story kinda like..not dyin but more like trailin off into 'this iz how it ended' rather then breakin it down even more but it wuz cool regardless

the sword vanished the demon was banished a good night for the light side
Eternally humble the man was stuck fightin some slight pride
the body was taken exhausted the man made the return to his own
Grateful amazed and in a daze the job was done he turned to go home

aint gotta prob with that finisher,wasnt bad

second verse: was better to me and had more description goin on

overall this was pretty good,as bill said its nice 2 see a different topic now n then from ppl,keep it up

[and be thankful i broke it down cuz i hardly ever do this lool]

Thanks guys... I definitely appreciate the detailed feedback... N yeah, I'll work on being more descriptive on my work...

Alright, everybody already broke it down.

It's a different style for Illest to see and it's refreshing.

The emotion was nice.

I'd give it an 8.8/10. Obviously, you have been writing for a while.

Keep it up.