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My 44 is hostile mug shot on my profile Let this sinna in if the church'll let me
2 on 1 stacks always against me But i stay rocked like Hard work Pesci

raiza Sharpe the pino from the US with the A up front
Trust me i must be fussy Coz i keep minimal bodies up in my trunk

Dont Get me wrong i aint the type to write a diss
im neva right at this but im known to fight a bitch

Never get it twisted im prone to risk it type to sit ya down and offa u trinkets and biscuits
i aint got the skills but dont even think it Coz Like a birdie on the fourth im know to sink it

I'll be straight TGYH u my homie and eyy thang
Yeh No Hate at All So i aint gonna say any thang

But to you hazard I'll Run u off this site faster then Speedy Gonzales
Bullshit u a G, You're Bullshit to me U a paki aint from New yorks needy projects

And forgive us our sins, As we forgive those who sin against us ...

Okay Lets Act Like civil construction, Dont Let this situation become spontanueos combustion
Coz Raiza Sharpe Like a volcano ho im known for eruption Im Facin My Niggaz but i still dont trust em

Yeh i Dont trust Em so i Leave em Coz they snitched on me
Like bitch oh Please, Kill their bodies dont need em dont grieve em

Fuck hate Aint No point in Bucked Gz or Chucked Trees Fuck writin this Diss no point fightin u bitch
Ayo Lemme Light u a Spliff Leave u Quiet for this Big Like Struck Dz .. OH PS: FUCK BEEF

Not a bad piece. Punches were pretty good. Structure was really off, and flow was kinda ehhhhhhhh because of it.

Keep droppin though. Better than previous pieces.

Your flow was off in spots but all in all, this is a pretty dope piece kid. Liked the concept as well. Keep droppin, you're getting better.

However, what is this:

And forgive us our sins, As we forgive those who sin against us ...

doing 2/3 of the way through it? And Bill's right. The structure sucks. But, you're young yet. Keep writin, work on your shit, and you'll be aright.

A positive drop showing humility and the desire to elevate... Lots of respect. I saw some multies and whatnot in there so I can tell you're working at it. Keep at it man, you got my props.

Double.FL wrote:However, what is this:

And forgive us our sins, As we forgive those who sin against us ...

Im sayin like, im guilty of this beef shit too.
And Like everyone does it, and i aint exempt.
And we all gotta Learn to move past that and "forgive each other"
Lmao . Abit cheezy but ey.,


Gracias for the feed dudes.

UPPING!

every is guilty of it homie, its our pride and willingness to never to give up. this shit was a positive for you even though your flow fell off you should maturity in your flow and ur elevatin so thats always good..

Good Lookin out on the feed.
Uppin .

it was ok man, there were a few ok punches here and there, none to quote
but yeah is this somekind of pology letter? shiit im beginning to think that ur
admitting ur sorry hehehe.

anyways the concept was ok, keep it comin, u got nowhere to go but up