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Cee4
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Fuck Yer Site Disses

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I was bored in work so what better way to pass the time than doing another site diss. I know there`s been a few recently but mine are much better lol.
No hate to anyone here.
i know i missed a few out but it was getting a bit long so next time.
feed will be appreciated. i promise i will return it




Orlando on 34th street with Santa threads, he aint beatin me without catchin a miracle
His multis are criminal, changed name! thats the only time Or`s matchin his syllabeles
This “monkeys barsâ€
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Post by Meta-the-DEMON »

It was pretty entertaining to read. Your multies and punches came off forced a lot of the time though. Like the "throwback to the fetus/ blowback here with Jesus" rhyme.... And the "ex-humor/exhume her" wordplay... Those were forced. And speaking as a dude who's seen A LOT of battles, never never never use any sort of wordplay off of "defeat".. I actually saw a Goldbond foot cream commercial use that shit a while back... hahah. You had some ill shit though. Like the "great as a fossil/raped in the nostril" bar was raw and nicely executed. It was a nice read all-in-all man. Entertaining. Just tighten up the multies/wordplay a bit and you'll be killin' em. Props.
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thanks for the feed Meta. Lol i thought the two bars you highlighted might of been a bit dodgy.
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LMAO@ Mentionin My Name 3 Different Places
wow Talk About Obsession & Envy
i'll Leave U Feed When i Have Time
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-.HaZarD.- wrote:LMAO@ Mentionin My Name 3 Different Places
wow Talk About Obsession & Envy
i'll Leave U Feed When i Have Time

nah that aint obsessive. ive just dropped a topical on Wild Bills nostrills. uppin
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