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Know H Ta tha A Z's-Flow Venom-Spit
As Soon Dese Phoneys.Go En-um-quick
Dis .Lethal Injection'll. Hit-N -kill
Body (People insessions) Spitten-ill
Smile i'll Dent ya Dentlez Homez
& Have u Cryin like a Sentalmental Poem
Bash ya Brain in , Till its Mental Foam
You Slippin-Son Got ( New Lube?)
Ya Grippinz-Gunz Ain ( New Noob)
Dood a Fuckin Acta u Missin-1 ( You Tube?)
Ima Ghost like a An-Cista,
Nun Sayin im Playin wid Fire An-Sista?
Look At My Palmz Check Da Han-Blistaz
In a Whip Bumpin-Canibus in a L Clumpin-Canibus
Itz like a class Of suicidal People ona cliff,whoeva jumpz da Man-Ta-Diss
I Dunno Even Know What This Loser-Bout
Only Clique He Got Offa Computer-Mouse
His Truth (Comes up short) like a Chic Frum Hooterz-Blouse
you Aint Really (Ridin Rat) Nah You's More a Scooter-Mouse
It Still Bothers-Me-See
How Rappaz Below Zero Thinkin Dey Hotter-Den-Me
They Couldnt Out "Come out Tough" if Dey Fathers-Wus-G'z
Dey'll Give You a (B.J) Like Dey Comin Wid a Otter-Dats-P
Dick-Suckin-Rapperz My Clique-Fuckin-Raptorz
Dat'll Prove u ain Sick Den u'll Get Siq'd-Fuckin-After
How u Seein-Me-Clown As u Bein-da-Ground
He'll Get Smoked Like He-In-a-Pound
Makin um Scratch His Title Like Keyin-a-Crown

Pretty nice piece.

Multis throughout, flow was good, wordplay was good.

His Truth (Comes up short) like a Chic Frum Hooterz-Blouse
you Aint Really (Ridin Rat) Nah You's More a Scooter-Mouse
It Still Bothers-Me-See
How Rappaz Below Zero Thinkin Dey Hotter-Den-Me
They Couldnt Out "Come out Tough" if Dey Fathers-Wus-G'z
Dey'll Give You a (B.J) Like Dey Comin Wid a Otter-Dats-P
Dick-Suckin-Rapperz My Clique-Fuckin-Raptorz
Dat'll Prove u ain Sick Den u'll Get Siq'd-Fuckin-After
How u Seein-Me-Clown As u Bein-da-Ground
He'll Get Smoked Like He-In-a-Pound
Makin um Scratch His Title Like Keyin-a-Crown

Like that little section the most outta the whole piece.

this was mostly good. good to see ya switchin the style up a bit

Know H Ta tha A Z's-Flow Venom-Spit
As Soon Dese Phoneys.Go En-um-quick
Dis .Lethal Injection'll. Hit-N -kill
Body (People insessions) Spitten-ill
Smile i'll Dent ya Dentlez Homez
& Have u Cryin like a Sentalmental Poem
Bash ya Brain in , Till its Mental Foam
You Slippin-Son Got ( New Lube?)
Ya Grippinz-Gunz Ain ( New Noob)
^^^^
dope. flow, multis this section had everything


Ima Ghost like a An-Cista,
Nun Sayin im Playin wid Fire An-Sista?
Look At My Palmz Check Da Han-Blistaz
In a Whip Bumpin-Canibus in a L Clumpin-Canibus
Itz like a class Of suicidal People ona cliff,whoeva jumpz da Man-Ta-Diss
I Dunno Even Know What This Loser-Bout
Only Clique He Got Offa Computer-Mouse
His Truth (Comes up short) like a Chic Frum Hooterz-Blouse
you Aint Really (Ridin Rat) Nah You's More a Scooter-Mouse
^^^^^
i thought you kinda fell off a bit here. i dunno i found the flow a bit difficult to follow compared to the first few bars

How Rappaz Below Zero Thinkin Dey Hotter-Den-Me
They Couldnt Out "Come out Tough" if Dey Fathers-Wus-G'z
Dey'll Give You a (B.J) Like Dey Comin Wid a Otter-Dats-P
Dick-Suckin-Rapperz My Clique-Fuckin-Raptorz
Dat'll Prove u ain Sick Den u'll Get Siq'd-Fuckin-After
How u Seein-Me-Clown As u Bein-da-Ground
He'll Get Smoked Like He-In-a-Pound
Makin um Scratch His Title Like Keyin-a-Crown
^^^^
then you seemed to pick it up again here



overall this was good. flow, multis and wordplay were good. only criticism is that the flow was a bit off in the middle

This piece had a dope flow.
Nice to see you gettin more structured, deffo added alot to ya piece.
Some nice hazard wordplay in dere
Punches were koo so were ur multis.

One of ya best pieces.