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Trama..
no time 4 under dogs they wanna hear kurses breath
but i let it go cuz this anger I AINT EVEN DISPERSE IT YET
im soul snatchin get the hearses set,its me versus death
yall say ill lose but thats only cuz ur first'ta bet
fear in ur eyes,scared of death? im'a worse threat
brain bleedin but yall scared ta get ur PURSES WET?
im the type ta flex my change,pro-ject the pain
i can do better without any check or chain
check the name tramatik bitch i respect the game
but in my eyes lately u fools expect the same
so i hear it all bitches whos the next'ta complain?
THIS IS WHERE I STAND like im in plex's brain


CEE4!
U cant envision what Cee spits, vets sniping in the shadows like religious extremists
Half them washed up, Im the king of the newbies and the new prestigious regime fits
scripts enlightening, like a Dalai Lama spiritual lesson, beef with me is Miracle testin
Textcees aint got talent? How can you ridicule textin when every syllables questioned?
A lyrical recession, I`ll cause Illests livestock to depreciate, like the power of the dollar
I Reign supreme, knock me down, and like the Manhattan skyline I'll tower that bit taller
Reppin Glasgow Calton, the dealers glower on the corner, bringin powder to the squalor
there's power in a collar, fuck a Baptist cleansing me, rather have a shower and a sauna
raining punches, shower them with trauma, golden flow gets u like u been kissed by Midas
Pack a bong, try this n leave with bronchitis, I roll a killa blunt call it a Cuban missile crisis
Their missin my maturity n my humour, Sarcastically stompin, im tiny like an elephant
Kurse said it best, im grimey but intelligent, and Ekoms…he`s behind me and irrelevant
I fell off? Plex gave him a lifetime achievement, I got his family in line for bereavement
He went audio for the winter, it sucked! so he got sent home to find where the heat went
I'll Never get recognition like Obama, but victories guaranteed like John McCain`s seat
But im an intellectual, like a black hoody, I might go over ya head but I still remain street
The Pretenders want the kings throne, they`ll never take me alive like the real Jim Jones
girls want a nose job to be Kim clones, n kids think their gangsta coz they steal ring tones
Aim tame and maimin em, their own brain starts shaming em, n the pain starts drainin em
Cee`s mind needs stimulation, the E`s flamin the cranium and the canes Kurt Kobain`n him
my honest ways, I get it on at raves, and Phantom? He gets beat for kicks like bondage slavesHAHA..
Whos this Guy-to-Speak? i'll Tie His Beak Like a Mini Grill Dis Small Frie-is-Weak
Haz Vs Smokey?! Guess i'll Spazz n Smoke-E He Potrayed Only Az-a-Joke-See
Koms Capone?.. u a MOBSTA-STOP you'll Run Unda ya Shell Like a LOBSTA TOP
When i "Pound it out" like Wen a RASTA COPZ N get unda ya Skin like a DOCTAZ SHOT
Lonely-Nigga Kill ya self Shoot ya Boney-Figgah WAIT! supersoakerman u Gotta PHONEY TRIGGA
So the Only Thing u Smokin iz HOMIEZ CIGGA, On Roc Thinkin Wid Flow-He-Jigga
Kill Um Den Bury Dood Unda Da BASEMENT u Can "BET" he wont SHOW-ME-TIGGA
Yall Sayin Ekoms The BEST-STOP-IT!! Yall Higher Den Dis HEFFS-SOCK-ITZ
Fuck a Rap Career Dawg you Dont Got The "Right Material" Like My LEF-POCK-IT
C Killd Um doodz Ship Musta-Sunk Had um "Walkin On Line" like da BUSTA DRUNK
Thinkin you'll Blow Durin ya AUDI-YO-PRIME u NUTCASE u ( AUDI-YO-MINE!)
So Kill-ya-Self like Crackin-Jokes & Let it jus "BOIL OVER" Like CRACKIN COKE

Holy shit was tight. A LOT of quoteables. Haz's seemed to be the weaker verse out of the 3, but all were really good.

Cee killed it and obviously shined because he wrote more, but he just tore shit up with those punches.

Tram, good verse, short though, flowed well though.

Haz nice wordplay and good punches.

Liked every verse. Good to see a nice collab.

who's verse is who's? tramatic cee and haz? in that order right? it wasn't bad i liked the use of multis in cee's verse for the opener

sweet collabo guys, real good read.

Its pretty obvious who's part was whos on this one Koms, their styles stand out from each of their verses.
Cee outshined the rest, but i guess its cuz he was angrier than the two about it lol

Tram's best parts

fear in ur eyes,scared of death? im'a worse threat
brain bleedin but yall scared ta get ur PURSES WET?

Cee's

Textcees aint got talent? How can you ridicule textin when every syllables questioned?
A lyrical recession, I`ll cause Illests livestock to depreciate, like the power of the dollar

Reppin Glasgow Calton, the dealers glower on the corner, bringin powder to the squalor
there's power in a collar, fuck a Baptist cleansing me, ather have a shower and a sauna
raining punches, shower them with trauma, golden flow gets u like u been kissed by Midas
Pack a bong, try this n leave with bronchitis, I roll a killa blunt call it a Cuban missile crisis

Haz's

Yall Sayin Ekoms The BEST-STOP-IT!! Yall Higher Den Dis HEFFS-SOCK-ITZ
Fuck a Rap Career Dawg you Dont Got The "Right Material" Like My LEF-POCK-IT


cee almost doubled the others' verses.

First good collabo in a long time.

MATE WHAT THE FUCK IS GOING ON HERE. YELLOW FONT COME ON LOL

lol and it says "Dark Blue=Cee4" in yellow!! hahahhaa

AYE THE DEEP BLUE. ITS SUNK LIKE HAZARDS VOCABULARY. LOL JOKE DONT CALL ME OUT OR ANYTHING

Tramatik..

You even used a reference to me and I still got to give you a thumbs down. It's a collab titled "all out" and you brought a little bit of your skill out.

I'd be lying if I gave you good feed. 6/10. Of course, you still have all the strengths, I've mentioned before in the verse.

But please up your wordplay/simile game.

C4...

You have great knowledge that gives you a benefit over a lot of people on Illest.

"Half them washed up, Im the king of the newbies and the new prestigious regime fits "

You write complex (no pun intended) as well.
But im an intellectual, like a black hoody, I might go over ya head but I still remain street

And in general you don't write to corny.

"Their missin my maturity n my humour, Sarcastically stompin, im tiny like an elephant"

All great assets.

Though, in reading your last three pieces,

I'm a bit worried about where your writing style is going.
But I seem to be the only one, so, it could be just me.

"Kill Um Den Bury Dood Unda Da BASEMENT u Can "BET" he wont SHOW-ME-TIGGA
Yall Sayin Ekoms The BEST-STOP-IT!! Yall Higher Den Dis HEFFS-SOCK-ITZ "

Worst bar of your verse Haz. I know it's hard to come up with a "high" simile that's original
but it might be getting a little ridiculous.

Besides that Hazard, I thought this was by far your best, most concise
and I-LL drop that I can remember.

I'd say, you had the strongest verse.

Overall, I didn't think (collab of the year candidate).

The pieces although similar is content didn't go together well for me.

Tramatik:

Your verse was short, but multies and flow were pretty good.

no time 4 under dogs they wanna hear kurses breath
but i let it go cuz this anger I AINT EVEN DISPERSE IT YET
im soul snatchin get the hearses set,its me versus death
yall say ill lose but thats only cuz ur first'ta bet
fear in ur eyes,scared of death? im'a worse threat
brain bleedin but yall scared ta get ur PURSES WET?

^^^^^^

Fave bars from Trama

Cee4:

U had the best verse IMO U had some dope and creative punches in ya verse. wordplay and similies were good.

U cant envision what Cee spits, vets sniping in the shadows like religious extremists
Half them washed up, Im the king of the newbies and the new prestigious regime fits

A lyrical recession, I`ll cause Illests livestock to depreciate, like the power of the dollar
I Reign supreme, knock me down, and like the Manhattan skyline I'll tower that bit taller

raining punches, shower them with trauma, golden flow gets u like u been kissed by Midas
Pack a bong, try this n leave with bronchitis, I roll a killa blunt call it a Cuban missile crisis

^^^^^^^

Fave bars from Cee

Haz:

You held it down as far as punches multies and Wordplay goes. Flow was good, keep using the same amount of multies in ur lines, that'll make ya verses flow better.

Koms Capone?.. u a MOBSTA-STOP you'll Run Unda ya Shell Like a LOBSTA TOP
When i "Pound it out" like Wen a RASTA COPZ N get unda ya Skin like a DOCTAZ SHOT

So the Only Thing u Smokin iz HOMIEZ CIGGA, On Roc Thinkin Wid Flow-He-Jigga
Kill Um Den Bury Dood Unda Da BASEMENT u Can "BET" he wont SHOW-ME-TIGGA

Fuck a Rap Career Dawg you Dont Got The "Right Material" Like My LEF-POCK-IT
C Killd Um doodz Ship Musta-Sunk Had um "Walkin On Line" like da BUSTA DRUNK

^^^^^^6

Fave bars from Haz.

thanks for the people. especially the few that leave feed on most my drops.

plex what did u mean when you said you were worried about my writing style? lol

Cee4 wrote:thanks for the people. especially the few that leave feed on most my drops.

plex what did u mean when you said you were worried about my writing style? lol

I think, if you got to the point quicker sometimes, it would help. I don't know though.

It's really so OPINION based, I don't want to give you that criticism

ok. i`ll bear that in mind