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kinda switched it up a bit here. feed will be returned



I picture you dead, my twisted mind hosts fatal impressions
Oh you poppin?, I`ll bring you down like post natal depression
insemination, bout to burst, and in my nuts is your brother
The afterbirth, im so umbilical, yes im stuck on ya mother
punch king was the seed, they came at me like sperm cells
I just don't see them anymore, I hope that those germs well…

They pulled out to rub it in, they aint been hot since a stain
Just like Aaliyah, u can rock the boat but ur not on my plane
My thoughts are not trains, fuck conforming, I stay off track
brain drives by u, gamble? look what happened that day with pac..

Like chasin roulette debts, they had their spin and aint come up
stop them reaching twenty one, no blackjack, they got bum luck
talkin a lot of fruity shit, stay in the chatroom and play ya slot
Talent cant be bought, lyricists lets go all in and I`ll take the pot

Didn't work for me dude.

I definitely saw the wordplay and where you were going creatively.

And I have to give you props for that.

Personally, I love to experiment with different concepts, it helps your overall experience
and you realize what works and doesn't.

So , definitely don't be afraid to switch it up.

Overall, I just didn't feel this as a whole, but you can't completely disregard it.

Smart lines like

"talkin a lot of fruity shit, stay in the chatroom and play ya slot
Talent cant be bought, lyricists lets go all in and I`ll take the pot"

Kept me interested through the whole piece.

It's always great to use analogies like that.

Dis Wus Aiight
u Had aite Concepts but ain Connect rite..
Like Dood sed Above dere its Kool to Experiment
but This just Wusnt u..
i'd Give it a 4/10.. O yeah lol Nice Subliminals

ha ha 4/10. Hazard id love to see you break this down and explain why this is a 4/10 piece. subliminals cloud peoples judgement dont they

lol Come on Now Dont Get Ass Hurt
cus U Tried somethin New & it Ain a 8/10
i Give Honest Judgement Niggah Simple n Plain
N i'll Break it Down Ina Lil While

haha its cool man. i appreciate the feed. it wasnt a 4/10 piece but i suppose thats our different opinions. just thought it is a bit funny that u always like my stuff and give me good feed til we start goin at each other or i drop subliminals then all of a sudden everything i do is wack and corny. just an observation. its all good. after all we are only pretend rappers on the internet