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Devil subjected heavy medal rebel
executive, selected to settle wars, embezzle
federal funds with several guns
in desert suns, selling wars with clever puns
we'll never run, cuz we stand and fight
shooting every man in sight until our hands are white
mimes, shooting nines, to humanize
that'll put our troops inside a humans eyes
improving lives, so even the truths a lie
from our view, who do we decide to crucify
those who use to buy weapons, they terrorized
in essence, with sky high investments
buying artillery, seconds left in adolescence
and they are killing me, for stability
they want me to fill the peace
build the streets, kill the wilderbeast
and we helped destabilize the middle east
our countries ill advised, still surprised
they don't want to live our little lives
as our views on democracy multiplies
then our culture dies as a result of lies
close your eyes, and see across the sea
can you believe we brought democracy
my philosophy is often seen as hypocrisy
cuz I want to win,it's more than hip hop to me
I rock the beat, with political rhetoric
constantly, let it not be suspected
I don't get it, I too want to be protected
but don't tell me, 9/11 and Iraq are connected
nor am I sending death threats to those elected
that's their perspective and I won't respect it
so my flows rejected like I don't show a method
of madness to my intellect, we're slow to exit
leave it to me, to complex it, when i assess it
they suggest it's a message of progressive
expression, how impressive is the lesson
when you get neglected for addressing
or at least second guessing, our direction
as the power lessens, think how your election
is now, and don't believe all cleverly worded rhymes
blurted, even I blurred the lines
when i murdered mine, i deserve a lot heard or not
because once again I stirred the pot
this is I Am American number 2
and like Political Candidates, I am stumping you

Devil subjected heavy medal rebel
executive, selected to settle wars, embezzle
federal funds with several guns
in desert suns, selling wars with clever puns
we'll never run, cuz we stand and fight
shooting every man in sight until our hands are white
mimes, shooting nines, to humanize
that'll put our troops inside a humans eyes
improving lives, so even the truths a lie
from our view, who do we decide to crucify


I Was Realin feelin This Lil Part Plex
you Spazzd Wid da Multis


It Was The Best Part Of your Whole Piece to Be honest
I Liked how you just stayd On The Topic & Slowly built ya Flow up
Explainin Where you Stand.. Dat Wus Pretty Koo

Keep Droppin ..

nice i'm new and need 2 rap better
your da sort of person that i can learn from

yeah plex is sick with this shit.


in desert suns, selling wars with clever puns
we'll never run, cuz we stand and fight
shooting every man in sight until our hands are white


is now, and don't believe all cleverly worded rhymes
blurted, even I blurred the lines
I deserve a lot, heard or not

those parts were meaningful (more than the others imo)

but yeah this is a strong piece man, every line had a strong message to it.

Your closer was aite, it was decent but i think u could have ended it better, not that i can do better but yeah.
Good Shit. i give it a 8.7876/10 lol

they don't want to live our little lives
as our views on democracy multiplies
then our culture dies as a result of lies
close your eyes, and see across the sea
can you believe we brought democracy
my philosophy is often seen as hypocrisy
cuz I want to win,it's more than hip hop to me
I rock the beat, with political rhetoric
constantly, let it not be suspected
I don't get it, I too want to be protected
but don't tell me, 9/11 and Iraq are connected
nor am I sending death threats to those elected
that's their perspective and I won't respect it
so my flows rejected like I don't show a method
of madness to my intellect, we're slow to exit
leave it to me, to complex it, when i assess it
they suggest it's a message of progressive
expression, how impressive is the lesson
when you get neglected for addressing
or at least second guessing, our direction
as the power lessens, think how your election

that whole part was jus insane man, this drop was crazy ill homie, no problems from my point of view

they want me to fill the peace
build the streets, kill the wilderbeast
and we helped destabilize the middle east
our countries ill advised, still surprised
they don't want to live our little lives
as our views on democracy multiplies
then our culture dies as a result of lies
close your eyes, and see across the sea
can you believe we brought democracy
my philosophy is often seen as hypocrisy
cuz I want to win,it's more than hip hop to me

good shit man^,stood out,multis obviously were good,n flow wuz better then usual 2 me,keep droppin man

fuckin dope piece here.

multis and flow were good. the thing that makes this dope is that the general ideas of this piece have been said before but you put a different spin on it. for example the whole middle east thing has been done so if you gonna talk about it you have to make sure you add something a little different which you did

and we helped destabilize the middle east
our countries ill advised, still surprised
they don't want to live our little lives
as our views on democracy multiplies
then our culture dies as a result of lies
close your eyes, and see across the sea
can you believe we brought democracy
my philosophy is often seen as hypocrisy
cuz I want to win,it's more than hip hop to me
I rock the beat, with political rhetoric
constantly, let it not be suspected
I don't get it, I too want to be protected
but don't tell me, 9/11 and Iraq are connected
nor am I sending death threats to those elected
that's their perspective and I won't respect it

^^^^
my favourite section
i thought the verse dropped a little a bit after this section. Personally i would have ended the verse at that point

This type of drop is what u do best.. the way u complement ur flow with em multies, not makin one line feel choppy is impressive.. i've seen u drop really strong verses before, but this was enlighting - to me, and it should be to every writer in this site.. doesn't matter how long or how good u are, cause i haven't seen one person doing something like that.. the closest is symbolikull, if I remember correctly.. in other words:

IT'S A FUCKIN DOPE DROP!!