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I decimate those who test-n-hate U want me to give u n L, battle me I'd love-to//
Lyrically on a high level, I'mma Wii u a TV so u could say that my bars above-u//*
I ain't faithful, and bitches love me so I ain't concerened about losing-ya-mommy//
N dude's who've gotten shot before act like Katie Homes.. cuz they cruise-with-the-Tommy//
I'm keeping ballas-pissed, I'll maul-a-bitch, faggots ain't up to par, my raps is marvalous//
I'll slay any wack Emcee n no1 would care cuz the only 1 that cares about u dikes a geologist!//**
The way u flowing-is-wack, u afraid of ya parent knowing-ya-rap, yet u claim to hold-a-toasta//
But ain't got no-pound, when it 'go-down' I'll leave 'em with they hands up like roller-coastas!//
I'll demolish-a-vet, diminish u, tarnish-ya-rep, believe me fam, u don't wanna have P-Test-ya//
I'll send dun-to-hell, n when it comes to L's? I'll make ya See'Um/CM Punk like that Drug free-wrestla!//
Honestly, who's ill as me, I got no manners, I'll spit in ya plate,break-ya-back, take-ya-stacks//
U don't think im sick? Hit ya head with a fascismile machine just so u could face-the-facts/fax!//
Am I blessed-yes! Fuck dudes sending death-threats, most of them ain't got tha hear-ta-maim//
U's an average MC, so if u think u a 'Hot Boy' I'll beat ya till ya chances of living start-to-'Wane'!//

*=The Wii sensor bar
**= http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dike_%28geology%29

^ Thanks, uppin

I decimate those who test-n-hate U want me to give u n L, battle me I'd love-to//
Lyrically on a high level, I'mma Wii u a TV so u could say that my bars above-u//*

Good bar, I dont think it hit as hard as I wanted it to, but it was creative.

I ain't faithful, and bitches love me so I ain't concerened about losing-ya-mommy//
N dude's who've gotten shot before act like Katie Homes.. cuz they cruise-with-the-Tommy//

Very creative, solid bar, liked this bar a lot.

I'm keeping ballas-pissed, I'll maul-a-bitch, faggots ain't up to par, my raps is marvalous//
I'll slay any wack Emcee n no1 would care cuz the only 1 that cares about u dikes a geologist!//**

NICE! Some people won't the "dikes geologist" part but I did and that was some real nice creative shit man. Favorite bar of the whole piece.

The way u flowing-is-wack, u afraid of ya parent knowing-ya-rap, yet u claim to hold-a-toasta//
But ain't got no-pound, when it 'go-down' I'll leave 'em with they hands up like roller-coastas!//

Another solid bar.

I'll demolish-a-vet, diminish u, tarnish-ya-rep, believe me fam, u don't wanna have P-Test-ya//
I'll send dun-to-hell, n when it comes to L's? I'll make ya See'Um/CM Punk like that Drug free-wrestla!//

Didn't like this bar too much. It was creative, but I don't think it hit.

Honestly, who's ill as me, I got no manners, I'll spit in ya plate,break-ya-back, take-ya-stacks//
U don't think im sick? Hit ya head with a fascismile machine just so u could face-the-facts/fax!//

Creative yet again, nice.

Am I blessed-yes! Fuck dudes sending death-threats, most of them ain't got tha hear-ta-maim//
U's an average MC, so if u think u a 'Hot Boy' I'll beat ya till ya chances of living start-to-'Wane'!//

Another creative bar.

In summary: The whole thing together is solid. Good flow, good wordplay, very creative with some of those bars, some didn't hit as well, but others made up for it. Good punches. Some punches kind of missed, other than that good piece, you're getting better and better.

Feed On: flows-ice-cold-ft-wild-bill-and-complexity-vt8597.html if you will.

damn this was nice. a lotta punches and wordplay. you`ve tided the structure up as well which is good

I ain't faithful, and bitches love me so I ain't concerened about losing-ya-mommy//
N dude's who've gotten shot before act like Katie Homes.. cuz they cruise-with-the-Tommy//

^^^
haha dope punch. that was my favourite bar