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March 13th, 2009

may the court come to silence,we need to work to stop the violence//
the house shows nothin but defiance,the senate just cant find us//
whos with the cause,show ur appreciation with your applause//*clappin and hooting starts*
cant fast forward so press pause,let us be free from this all mighty jaws//
alright its settled, the 4th of July is when we set sail//
like when we came from Britain when all else fails//
we look at our ancestors,we look at our 4 fathers//
go ahead u can test us,society gives us a reason to bother//
thats it for today, the court is adjourned//
go to every capital and let it be burned//

may 4th, 2009

one more month, 30,000 Americans ready to take a stand//
i guess thats a bunch,found us in D.C. like hundreds of bands//
picket signs, chants, up roar in the crowd, start a riot//
sicken finds under Bush's carpet we aint gonna buy it//
no need to lie,we know all about the so called area 51//
no need to die because our words are our thrifty gun//
we know everything that goes behind the curtains//
because we are the cameras taking picture of what is certain//
so lets rise above this society and show them whos boss//
no more givin us anxiety its time for u to have a loss//

July 4th, 2009
(party sounds large crowd fireworks going off microphone comes on)

BUSH WE'RE NOT GOING TO TAKE THIS ANYMORE!//
STOP TREATING US LIKE A LITTLE PENNY WHORE!//
WE ARE HERE TO DEPLETE YOUR MASTERMINDED PLANS//
U WILL NEVER COMPLETE KILLIN OFF OUR MANS//
PULL US OUT OF IRAQ, NO MORE BLOOD FOR OIL//
OUR LIMBS ARE STILL INTACT REPLACE MUD FOR SOIL//
LETS GO AND SHOW THIS COUNTRY WHAT WE'RE ABOUT//
LETS GO IN COP CARS AND WHEN THEY ARREST US SHOUT!//(big riot breaks out the city and country goes into chaos)
GIVE BACK OUR TAXES, RECYCLE OUR PLASTICS//
THIS TIME WE ARE THE FASTEST LIKE WE'RE FASTING//
NO MORE FOOD NO MORE WATER, MASS SUICIDE//
KILLIN OFF DAUGHTERS, NO NEED TO RIDE//
PUT US BEHIND BARS,BUT WE STILL BURNING 5-0 CARS//
AFTER ITS DONE ULL SEE STARS COZ WE TOOK WAT IS OURS//(gun shot,police sirens,news castors talking fading out)

your getting alot better dude, alot better then other drops i'll never hate if you keep trying, keep it up stick with it.. keep droppin

Thnx

i seem to better when it comes to topics like that

This wasn't bad man. Compared to previous drops. If you stay hungry to get better and to elevate, you will elevate, and fairly quick being you pretty know the basics.

Work with what you have, this drop wasn't bad at all. You say you excel in pieces like this, so, keep writing pieces like this. Use your strengths to your advantage, and the rest will come.

Keep goin' man.

will do captain lol
thnx for the feed.

hmm everyone is kissing
ur ass with all that 'get better bullshit'
but meh..real feed helps u get better

so ur multies fell off alot, ur rhyme scheme was terrible for a piece
like this.
but u did get ALOT better
but if ur tryna motivate ppl into a revolution against
the government u might wanna try broadening your
vocab..dont ever use pennywhore again...smh
u need to learn how to approach different pieces
which emotion and which style to use
on pieces like these think linkin park/fort minor

linkin park-hands held high
^^great example

word its not about me being the greatest when i drop its motivation when ppl say im getting better that means that im improving which in return make me get better but i know what ur saying

yeah i know i shouldnt of used pennywhore lol but i didnt really know what else to rhyme but thanks for the feed

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