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Witness Me Fail

Posted: Tue Apr 29, 2008 1:30 pm
by Haz
You Wanna Witniss.Me.Fail
Datz Why im gettin 2 Bizzniss.fa.Rail
What Iz-Diss-On-Scale "FOR"
is My State-a-Min still i Cnt Wait-Ta-Grine
GotChu a Heavy Weight-At-Timez
Got My Plate.N.Shined Afta i Ate.a.Line
On da Low We Livin.Ta.Die
Datz why This Life im Livin.It.High
My Destinyz Forbiddind.Da.Sky
Remain in Hell So im Hiddin.2.Eyez
Ain Down For Kiddin.Or.Liez
They Drivin Me Krazy Like a Instructor
Permiddin.a.Guy
Life Got Us Boxed in So We Ride.in.a.Circle
Gettin Green in Da Streetz Providin.Da.Purple
Lifez.a.Haze Of Course i Like.2.Blaze
On Da Trifist.Dayz End Up in Da Cloudz
Lyk I Lived My Life Da Righteous.Way

Posted: Tue Apr 29, 2008 1:45 pm
by 16 Micz
like the closing bar, this was a decent drop, the verse had catchiness, no unnecessary lyricism, but the lyrics were there, the flow from wha i read was good, it would sound good on a beat im sure.

Posted: Tue Apr 29, 2008 2:00 pm
by Haz
Thanks

Posted: Tue Apr 29, 2008 11:07 pm
by Haz
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Posted: Thu May 01, 2008 12:28 am
by |.R.SON.aLL.|
..I already Told You about This Drop ..
Multies Were Deffo There ..
That Last Punch Was ill ..
It Outshined Tha Rest ..
Man ..That Hiddin 2 Eyes Line ..
Not Feelin it
..Everythin Else Was Good ..
Big Ups

Posted: Thu May 01, 2008 2:23 am
by - Mutual -
i liked it
packin da multies
flow was tight
prob sound good over a beat
keep'em comin
good shit

Posted: Fri May 02, 2008 7:11 am
by Arvincible
Yea ur flow was better for the reading part and ur ,ultis were on point, ur spelling kinda throws me off everynow and then and it makes me think im reading the writing of someone from jamaica, cuz I get that kinda reggae sound in my head when I read ur writing. Lol
But all in all the content of ur drops are more meaningful than that and this drop was decent considering ur multis and flow was stronger than usual.

Keep it comin son, stay up

Posted: Tue May 06, 2008 5:22 am
by Dead Silence
i like the general idea of it.
the wordplay was ight

one thing i didnt like was the structure

ex
My Destinyz Forbiddind.Da.Sky
Remain in Hell So im Hiddin.2.Eyez

i liked the bar but not the structure of it

i dk maybe its just me but it made it a tad bit hard to read

but overall good shit