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Same as the other, earlier, trying to find my style of writing, as you can tell, completely different from "Just So Everyone Knows".

Seeing your face
Makes me remember the days when I thought love was real
A feeling like that is something everyone should feel
Baby I wish I could tell you everything I want to
I see you with other guys and know youve moved to something new
Everytime I look at other girls I cant help but see your face
Being with these other girls makes me feel broken and out of space
Knowing that I will be nothing more than a thing of the past
It hits hard in the wrong place
Growing apart from you was my biggest mistake, but it happened so fast
Sayin I could be with anyone but you would be a lie
Its so hard for me to say it but I dont have a choice but to say goodbye
I drove past your house and saw your boys car parked in the street
It kills me to know you're happy without me, so I slammed the pedal with my feet
Doin 90 towards the water I almost reach the ledge
I slam on the brake, losing you for good is what stopped me from goin over the edge
Maybe theres still a chance for me and you
I wish that you will evenetually feel the same
Only time will tell if my one wish will come true

Everytime I look at other girls I cant help but see your face
Being with these other girls makes me feel broken and out of space
Knowing that I will be nothing more than a thing of the past
It hits hard in the wrong place
Growing apart from you was my biggest mistake, but it happened so fast
Sayin I could be with anyone but you would be a lie
Its so hard for me to say it but I dont have a choice but to say goodbye

^ Man this shit just Drove Me Krazy, Cus i've Been in da Position..
you Put Soo Much feeling into This it wus Fire.. Some people can Relate soo well...
you Stuck to da concept & Puttin Emphasis into it.. you Kept it a Poem ( Wud ur Best at)
& u Really Got My Attention Son.. Dat Lil Part is just wow.





Maybe theres still a chance for me and you
I wish that you will evenetually feel the same
Only time will tell if my one wish will come true <-- Great Way 2 End it & Tie in Da Title of da Poem


Man Fa'real you Got My Attention son, im in Poet mode right now.. & Den i Read dis N it Gave Me
more inspiration To Write a Poem.. but about Somethin Different... i Feel like ur Story wus explaind Well
Alot of Emotion wus Put Into This.. it Seems lyk it Wus a Real Experience...

10/10...