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A new verse, thoughts of a drunken lunatic.. wrote this shit at 3 am in the morning.,. haha, hope ya'll enjoy it..


from a moments of honesty and atonement of rage
to opponents on stage battlin to get their weekly wage
their biggest fear is to spit words in hysterics
So they sit up all night long rehursin their lyrics
sittin on the bus with the beat in my earphones
lookin out the window and seeing all the bare homes
it scares me holmes, like a gun to my face
u'd be runnin for days instead gunning for grace
this is change we belive in like Barack Obama
leavin more dead ends then the trackin of Osama
rappin for drama, give a crap about karma
when ur packin ur llama it's like ur slappin your mama
act like an armour and protect your family
respect the reality and accept your salary
it's about workin from scratches, gettin a name
the setting is set and I'm heading for fame
suddenly, it feels like I'm a mainstream artist
keepin myself relevant is what seems the hardest
release your smartness like an armless Scarface
he's harmless like artists, a carnage of garbage
many bosses, many losses embosses the causes for
the lack of offers from the bosses in this industry
it's a sin to me, they don't recognize talent
like a ugly girl won't be recognized by her gallant
a true rebellant like he formed the hippies in sixtees
and today he'd tell u what being stanky rich means
u gotta take your chances...

wow this was fuckin dope and i im not just sayin that

the verse stayed on topic brilliantly
flowed real smooth and was intelligent
i mean i your original. u bring somethin different to Illest

from a moments of honesty and atonement of rage
to opponents on stage battlin to get their weekly wage
their biggest fear is to spit words in hysterics
So they sit up all night long rehursin their lyrics
sittin on the bus with the beat in my earphones
lookin out the window and seeing all the bare homes
it scares me holmes, like a gun to my face
u'd be runnin for days instead gunning for grace
this is change we belive in like Barack Obama
leavin more dead ends then the trackin of Osama
^^^^
loved it

rappin for drama, give a crap about karma
when ur packin ur llama it's like ur slappin your mama
^^^^
this bar stood out coz it was the only one in the whole verse that i wasnt feelin

i couldnt really criticise anything else about this verse 9/10

thank you homie.. i really appreciate u takin time to read my verse!!

sickness man, you are a hard ass topical writer


idk where to start

their biggest fear is to spit words in hysterics
So they sit up all night long rehursin their lyrics
sittin on the bus with the beat in my earphones
lookin out the window and seeing all the bare homes
it scares me holmes, like a gun to my face
u'd be runnin for days instead gunning for grace
this is change we belive in like Barack Obama
leavin more dead ends then the trackin of Osama

that was my favo parts

man keep this runnin up man

i loved the read imma give it a 8.7/10

peace man keep it comin!!

One of the best pieces I've read in awhile. You've got skill.

thanks! .. it's much appreciated!!

Definetley agree with everything said so far. Your word choice, your flow, your structure, how the topic went, nailed all of it.

Whole piece was quotable, Arv and Cee already did that. Like I said, you nailed pretty much everything you were going for with this right here.

Agree with Arv and give this a high 8/10.

Good job, man.

thank u! favour will be returned!

one word one syllable crack lol shit was crack my nigga

lol.. thanks man! it's much appreciated!

..I Actually Enjoyed This Piece ..
Tha Flow Of it Stayed On Point all Tha Way Thru ..
Stayed On Topic ..
It Seemed More Like a Spoken Word Joint to Me ..
Cus I Felt it ..
Ya Know ..
Few Simple Metas Here and There ..
But it Didn't Take away From Tha Flow ..
It Was Good Fam ..