Hip Hop Forum

wait i got a story here's how it goes well,
if somebody got robbed cause of all there wealth
does it make ya happy for ya health
or happy that your the one wit da story to tell
now friends wot do you think of that man
should or do you think he stands
a chance to get into heaven maybe hell if he demands
some say yes some say no
some say here here some say go go
would you kill him if you were to know
he was da robber 3 days ago
but is it a crime should you so time
for seeing wit your eyes but percieve wit ya mind
is it evil in ya eyes or murder to despise
destruction in disguise,eruption in da skies
corruption with these lies,seduction to defy
touchin never bustin to be rushin wit these lines
that option dont fly,what do you think guys
should we reach to these young kids to connect
is there like a creed to select, greed to neglect
politicians givin feed u reject,man earn some respect
murder,none suspects, i run intercept messages
for mafuckas to forget, rhymin be one step
some feeling is enept, which since stealings wierd effect
gangstas watchin appealin to ya neck
revealin perplex messages,ya kneeling to express
that feeling that got you stressed like it's a test
but you caught a cap in ya chest ya dead
who do really think progressed

uppin feed this shit is better than my last drop

lol i dont know why you would up the thread 2 minutes after you posted but ok lol

anyway this was alright. you do talk about different topics and try to be original (when not biting) which is good. its still kinda basic but your definitly improving.

you could work on multis if you want to get better feedback. trust me if you put in multis your feed will improve because a lot of people prefer multis over lyrical content on here.

your flows still kinda choppy. to be fair multis will improve that

aight thanks anyway