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[font=Comic Sans MS]Life gets a lot harder, death is common truth be told
Cant seem to shake this curse that seem to follow
Wish I could see furhter so I can see what the future holds
Lump in my throat, makes some tears hard to swallow
Kids dying around me, before the reach an age of old
Another funeral makes my heart start to wallow
How much is there to live for, when your life gets sold
Friends dont seem to care, like to take life for granted
A pill here a pill there, sometimes too much to imagine
Ill never touch another drug with my feet firmly planted
Never waking up, why does this always seem to happen
Cant grasp the concept, my friends just keep dying
Another small casket, going to be placed into the ground
Helping my boys stop, maybes its me who's not trying
Cries fill the room, another child gone is a deafining sound
People think they're invincible, never nothing to fear
Its crazy to think that the same kids are my friends
I cant help but think who's next, 3 in less than a year
Another one taken, 18 years old is too quick to end
The graveyard is like a 2nd home, lives being forsaken
Its opened my eyes though, but I didnt want to see this
I whole heartedly regret every drink and drug Ive taken
And Ill try to never touch another, god as my witness

Take from that what you will, I really cant talk about it anymore right now. I just needed to write about it, it's the only thing that calms my nerves.[/font]

Nice ass piece my dude no bullshit real talk. A piece like this need not have killer lyrics and all other compontents because it had 2 things: flow and emotion. It was easy 2 read, making it better 2 read and comprehend and u can feel the emotion coming off this piece. Nice work

-!$Chicago$!

Kids dying around me, before the reach an age of old
^^
i didnt really like this line but i think this topic was very emotional
nothing really quotable or amazing about it, just a lot of emotion
up the vocab some and it would have been really captivating
u should try a part 2 after you feel comfortable enough to do so

"Ill never touch another drug with my feet firmly planted
Never waking up, why does this always seem to happen
Cant grasp the concept, my friends just keep dying
Another small casket, going to be placed into the ground
Helping my boys stop, maybes its me who's not trying
Cries fill the room, another child gone is a deafining sound
People think they're invincible, never nothing to fear
Its crazy to think that the same kids are my friends
I cant help but think who's next, 3 in less than a year
Another one taken, 18 years old is too quick to end
The graveyard is like a 2nd home, lives being forsaken
Its opened my eyes though, but I didnt want to see this
I whole heartedly regret every drink and drug Ive taken
And Ill try to never touch another, god as my witness "

Here on out it was solid as hell.

One of the main reason, that I hate drugs and resented them even when I did them.

You can't say much more than a nice emotional piece.

This was good. Lots of emotion. Like harle said there's nothing "BAM!" about it but poetry doesn't need a lot of flair to be good. Keep doin ya thing.

dope piece here i must of missed it.

on some real emotional shit.
i can relate to this in more ways than one.
yeah drugs will fuck u up if not used properly.


dope. anyway this is probably one of my favourite drops from u.

dis shit was was sick dawg u got off on dis one right here i gotta agree wit plex on dis one shit was emotional than a muthafucker much props