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Listen..
(J.Roc Was his Name)

he Sat on a hot block through cold nights
Saying i got rocs living the Same old Life
Mother Knew he sold,white she Said
"you have one life" he was never Told Twice..
Still he was up and runnin not givin a fuck whats comin
his way, his day was about gettin bucks and stunnin
the ladys he dugg the most so he sold Drugs,and.toast
copped a benz the thug wuld boast how he loves 2 coast
the streets of death..glove box filled with Heat and meth
not hearin his mother he "beat the deaf" feelin he'd never Meet regret
in Bed "under covers sleepin" while under covers Sneekin..
around his crib "searchin 4 packs" like whats around his ribs..
he had no Clue like joe buddin,still packin crack in wud he use 2 throw budd in..
walkin in da "Redzone" like Bros Bluddin..the word Freeze was sooo Suddin..

.......

( His Mother)

Dear J, im writin.you hopin theres might.in.you,
to fight.ya.way thru da storm & See a brighta day..
hope u kno in my hand a lighta.stays im chain smokin..
the pains soakin thru me as the needle has my vains pokin..
out.my.wrist..Living in this lonely houses.a.risk...
i'm stuck,in.denial your about 2 get fucked,in a trial..
why! cause i didnt raise you right? these days & nights
are filled with tears cause theres no Jay in sight...
I wanna leave this world but i Stay and write..
i Pray & fight..with myself u'll get out.. O..K you might..
If u dont get it..i'm Unsure about ya fate..
why were u sellin like ya kitchen table wus With out a plate??
the systems crooked..i really doubt your straight...
I Love you but im gone the Pills r in my Mouth..2.Late...

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ohh shit i loved it 10/10 nice shit

in Bed "under covers sleepin" while under covers Sneekin..
around his crib "searchin 4 packs" like whats around his ribs..
he had no Clue like joe buddin,still packin crack in wud he use 2 throw budd in..
walkin in da "Redzone" like Bros Bluddin..the word Freeze was sooo Suddin..

man my fave bit ^
this shit was very tight and the ending nice suprise
new shit

the systems crooked..i really doubt your straight...
I Love you but im gone the Pills r in my Mouth..2.Late...

Keep'em Comin

2 many quoteables in this piece ta list em all,which iz a good thing..newaayz,flow wuz good son,some nice multis here n there but i dont think u tried ur best in that area of writin..concept wuz good glad'ta see u steppin away from the whole agressive shit n do somethin else,this wuz pretty nice man,u gettin ur joe budden on lol stay@it man peace

Uppin 4 Feed..

Very sick with it... this was an ill topical...

You tore this shit up nice... good job fam...

[font=Comic Sans MS]Damn man.

Like Tram said the whole piece was a fucking quoteable.

Definetley killed this entire topic man. The mother's part was real strong, real deep, and real good.

Loved the whole thing homie. I dunno about it being absolutely perfect, but this was definetley like a 9.5 man.

Keep dropping stuff like this. It's a breath of fresh air to read this kind of stuff from you and you're killing it.[/font]

sick shit man i loved it, youve elevated alot since ive left, congrats bro

this was nice. a lot different from your usual drops i liked it.

the first section was straight but the half from the mothers perspective killed it.

Dear J, im writin.you hopin theres might.in.you,
to fight.ya.way thru da storm & See a brighta day..
hope u kno in my hand a lighta.stays im chain smokin..
the pains soakin thru me as the needle has my vains pokin..
out.my.wrist..Living in this lonely houses.a.risk...
i'm stuck,in.denial your about 2 get fucked,in a trial..
why! cause i didnt raise you right? these days & nights
are filled with tears cause theres no Jay in sight...
I wanna leave this world but i Stay and write..
i Pray & fight..with myself u'll get out.. O..K you might..
If u dont get it..i'm Unsure about ya fate..
why were u sellin like ya kitchen table wus With out a plate??
the systems crooked..i really doubt your straight...
I Love you but im gone the Pills r in my Mouth..2.Late...


yep the whole second section was a quotable

this was one of my favourite pieces from you. 9/10

10/10

amazing. keep this shit up. i smell a new writtin champion