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We got a room full of killers but I'm the inn-keeper, u in a spiral of death u couldn't spin-deeper,
And just when you thought things were endin-right, u spendin-nights in fear of the grim-reaper
Fuckas need to learn to accept-my-ways, heaven and hell joined forces trying to end-my-days,
Any dumb fool tryin to attempt-my-play, get more 'tired' than-highways, and end up being M.I.A.s
Bow down or I'll make-you-heel, and fuck the gun fight when my own words can shake-the-steal
You fake, im real, how does that make-ya-feel..tryin to brace urself knowin I can break-ya-shield?
cuz Im just out-of-ya-reach, and eliminatin these messy rap scums like some powder-and-bleach,
And u bloodsuckers'll learn that i devour-the-leech, bringin a tidal wave that'll overpower-a-beach
My empire has no boundries, u can takeover and make war like hitler or make peace like ghandi,
But i swear if you bring that little shit around-me, Ill make u look stupider than a team of blondies
Cuz I'll outmatch u, first detach u, take everything you ever loved in life n turn them into statues,
With a single command you'll understand that all the evil u couldn't stand had someone to ask-to,
Never in history will u see someone pull stunts that i pull, my words take more lives than fuckin-rifles
When I spit you see-life-pass speed-by-fast, so if i say "Let there be-light", ass it ain't the fuckin-bible
I lay back while u yellin-for-help, u can try to develope urself, cuz I'm makin u revel-the-shelves,
You're a leader? go ahead, assemble ya-elves, while I'm on another level enslavin the devil-himself...


this was supposed to be a part of this massive collabo, but it taking to long and i might not be around anymore to read it if i waited any longer. after i hit 30 wins im considering retirement, im not sure yet though.

uppin for feed

this was a nice piece overall 8/10
nice flow
nice multies

Fuckas need to learn to accept-my-ways, heaven and hell joined forces trying to end-my-days,
Any dumb fool tryin to attempt-my-play, get more 'tired' than-highways, and end up being M.I.A.s
Bow down or I'll make-you-heel, and fuck the gun fight when my own words can shake-the-steal
You fake, im real, how does that make-ya-feel..tryin to brace urself knowin I can break-ya-shield?

My Fave Bit^

Hmm

Piece was good, pretty technical

Multis, seemed a little robotic n' a little forced in places my advice would be to let them come natural, don't settle straight into a rhymce scheme cause then you have to stick to it.

close was prob the hottest bar, multis and flow jus' seemed hotter

overall, not my type of piece, had a few good lines, but none that reall made me stop and think

my opinion tho

keep doing...

Good Drop Fam ..
I Agree Wit MM Too Tho ..
But U Got Tha Flow And Multies Down Tight ..
All U Gotta Do is Up Them Punches ..and You`ll Really Be Deadly Son ...
Who Was U Collabin Wit?

This piece was pretty nice man.

As stated before flow and multies were on point. Sometimes it seems as if some of your bars, you just can't seem to finish them. Others are dope, then there's a mediocre one, and it switches back and forth.

Overall, good drop. Keep working on punches and all that, you'll only get better.

first piece ive read from u ages, good shit dude uve elevated alot i was impressed, still got a little work to do with the punches but i see ya settin up a few, i think the multies were pretty nice in most spots, maybe a tad forced but oh well, good shit man

I wrote this 2 months ago lol I just couldn't wait anymore. And I've been practicing on my punches, I think ill come out with a better piece within a week...I didn't think it was collabo worthy anyways, but yeah thanks for the feed guys its much appreciated.

Uppin for more feed!

this verse was pretty good. like people said some of the punchlines didnt hit as u would have liked. but the flow and multis were real good and the verse was solid. i wasnt feelin the structure. u could of halved the line lengths coz you had the inner rhymes to do that. u would of been left with a long ass verse but it would of been easier to read.


Never in history will u see someone pull stunts that i pull, my words take more lives than fuckin-rifles
When I spit you see-life-pass speed-by-fast, so if i say "Let there be-light", ass it ain't the fuckin-bible
I lay back while u yellin-for-help, u can try to develope urself, cuz I'm makin u revel-the-shelves,
You're a leader? go ahead, assemble ya-elves, while I'm on another level enslavin the devil-himself...
^^^^
you ended the verse really well

Thanks for the feed cee, much appreciated

Uppin kids

good flow, nice multies and shit

u cant retire we got the tag tourne yet fam

good drop tho

scip is a doosh^^

Lol tgyh, like I said this was written a while back man, I haven't really been motivated to write anything new, im not like bill or ghost, they just keep writing and writing, I've been focused in my battles and that's pretty much all I've been enjoying this past month. But yeah ill try to write something new up to express my elevation haha! But yeah thanks for the feed yo

well everyone has something to say about your drop, "this was a little off, or you blah blah" fuck that, im just gonna say it was a very nice drop i enjoyed reading it. And I Thank You.

good read man. shit seemed on pt pretty much. few minor shit but overall good shit.