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ohh shit. i got the stove on. the pots boilin the water but wheres the beef?!

alright i got it smells fresh aha!

yo Duc3! lets throw away this dead marker.

Green-Me
Red-Duc3

listen

magicmark, who do u think u is?dont diss me in public//
ur not as fresh as amiz, i got more stars than the Dominican Republic//

Arv says that im still a novice, boy im a vet compared to this cat//
im the government hes my province,and i can bet that he wont get back//

to where he thought he was,my rhymes spit out like i had an oozie on my side//
dont pay attention to what this dude does, because ill leave him feelin woozie,he tried...//

to diss me,ur a lil pissy,when u leave Illest ull ask "will anyone miss me?//
my flows crystal clear urs misty,my door opens one way dont fuckin try to kiss me//

man ur not superman, ur rhymes are limp,but still u insist MAGICMARKER TO THE RESCUE//
stfu my shits superb man,my lines smack u like a pimp,and leave ur jaw a little askew//

i will not hesitate to levitate higher than your peak, ur swag is straight up FUCKED//
i killed him in the kitchen wit a candle stick thats my Clue urs are weak,get BUCKED//

ok this is my last bar to dissin this sharpie, ill leave him out to dry,tear ur cap off ya head//
this bitch is faker than the first Barbie,stamped ya as like Da Guy,leave ur "Tire"ed ass wit no tread//*

*for u newbs. Da Guy was also known as Rhino.

you shoulda known i was goin to respond. dont play me stupid

I'll Kill You Swift You Son Of A Bitch,
I'm Bombin Ya Quick With A Razor On Ya Neck An One On Ya Wrist,
I'm Like That Old Skool Donkey Kong I Got Barrels Watch Me Start Launchin Tha Shit
I'll Leave Magic Mark With A Fast Depart Don't Fuck Around Faggot
I Practice Tragic Art, Calligraphy Literally Have Ya Peelin Be...
Artillery Aint Nothin Ta Mest With Ya Dersperate Watch Ya Flesh Rip Wen The Tech Spits
Mess With? Ya Shouldn't Of Guessed It..Dont Come To My Level Stick To Less Scripts
I'll Have You Hit Up In A Dress Kid....You Get Neglected An Embedded In Tombs
Ya Headed For Doom...I Stay Brained Infront Of This Pussy Like I Was Stickin My Head Out Tha Womb..
Flip The Lead Out Then BOOM!... It'z A Wrap...

5 4 3 2 1 YA SELF!

thanks. that was just a lil quickie. Arv said that he didnt think i was going to respond so i did. and duc3 just hopped in. thanks for the feed

UPPIN!

okay, i have no idea what kind of tip this site is on lol... another readjustment must be required

in Duc3 verse, all im seeing is multis and a decent flow... and played out gonna "kill me" stuff.. and the odd play (last one was decent)... TO ME.... that aint cuttin it anywhere.... but here it seems to be better than punches and plays??...i duno

Duc 3.... yeah rhyming is good, flow and multis cool.. but take out the one "magic mark" reference (which in that instance, could be anyones name i.e. its not in a play) and the wholer verse could be directed at anyone... no plays on shit... this is a cheap version, cause you know you battling me and you didnt wanna waste mark plays lol.... guaranteed you wont drop like that against me... so thats my problem with it.. too indirect....


Dead - okay this was good, but im still seeing a problem with simplisity and general venemoisty lol, in pieces, imo, you shud just be coming out.. "mark is a faggot.... etc" theres no real room imo, for saying "im the best" and what not, tho you aitn do it as much as usual.. plays themselves, should all me about me... and hurting me, which they wernt.. first lines talking about you have stars.. second line is a little indirect, and doesnt hurt me... the next line is the exact same, an awkward rhyme.. and your just saying " im gonna make him woozie" thats nothing lol.. you need sharp, plays and personals.. "dont try and kiss me" lik lol... that again, playign on the gay stuff aint gonna cut it.. theres a lack of hard hitting plays and punches... flow is cool and you seem to have a grasp at multis... but you need to read around the battle field.... look at the better peoples verses and see how theres differ to yours

overall decent... but im still dancin.... lol

Lmaoooo No Hate ..Thanks For Feed

UPPIN!

it wasnt good for a diss
like the kid said hes still dancing
nothing made me go "damn thats fucked up" or
laugh thats what a diss is all about
dead silence this was a lot better but
u still have a lot of elevating to do
in my opinion i think u should have
left duc3's part out because he didnt diss
"magic"?? one time. his verse coulda been directed
at anyone.

tru

Ok 4 a diss was dissapointed