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Omega Bill
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Fuck you Miilz, you fucking bum

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[font=Comic Sans MS]Fuckin aint close to me kid, Im known to dismember so you remember
Kid you been storin my nuts in ya fuckin mouth like a Squirrel in November!
Never, will u ever have a life, talk bout bodyin internet ppl with track names
The man on here, but in High School u got voted mos likely to contract AIDS!
Faggot, Ive beat people 10x better, when I look at you kid I fail to see a test
You keep gettin feed from VIP, but you niggas postin from the same IP Address!

http://img292.imageshack.us/img292/7508 ... essmp1.jpg (Damn)

Ill never be the best, u aint close, Ill spit fire at you so you have to stop n crawl
You wear sweaters at home, but turn ya hat sideways when u go to the shoppin mall!
You aint walkin tall, you a hustler? Kid, only on the streets when you suckin cock
Heard u got Tix to Monday Night Raw, thas the only time ull ever fuckin touch a Rock!
I know ya life sucked, growing up, with ya broke ass fam, always lookin too seek dough
But u the type to watch ya dad fuck your sister and beat ya meat through the peek hole!
You fucking suck, you always on someones dick or suckin wearin out ya knee pumps
Last time I heard of Miilz, you called out Me and Gunna then dissappeared for 3 months!
Chill the fuck out kid, quit runnin ya mouth, need to mellow out like ya feinin for a dube
Ill rearrange ya skeletal structure dude, and have ya meals come from a fuckin feedin tube![/font]
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Post by Dead Silence »

Killed em
straight up killed em


Ill never be the best, u aint close, Ill spit fire at you so you have to stop n crawl
You wear sweaters at home, but turn ya hat sideways when u go to the shoppin mall!
^loved it

and that IP shit was a good personal

you know my deal on what should be changed
but ur lazy ass didnt want too
so fuck ya :-D

but anyways props
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Post by - Mutual - »

props bill dope verse
nice flow
sum good punches this was fire
8.5/10
ya know
shiiiit
keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Post by Prophet »

This was pretty good, alot of pretty humorous lines like the Squirrel line, The Rock line was dope IMO, slightly played but I was still feeling it. My only advice would be to incorporate more wordplay in your disses and battles. Cuz ur good at coming up with hard personals, if u were to combine personals with some nice wordplay, your punches would hit twice as hard. Other than that, this was a nice diss.

You aint walkin tall, you a hustler? Kid, only on the streets when you suckin cock
Heard u got Tix to Monday Night Raw, thas the only time ull ever fuckin touch a Rock!

Fuckin aint close to me kid, Im known to dismember so you remember
Kid you been storin my nuts in ya fuckin mouth like a Squirrel in November!

Faggot, Ive beat people 10x better, when I look at you kid I fail to see a test
You keep gettin feed from VIP, but you niggas postin from the same IP Address!

^ Fav bars.
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Post by DressToKill »

That opener was fucking dope haha..very clever and the play was just humourous..Also the IP line was dope as hell to..nice personal and just clowned his ass..I really liked this verse Bill it was a big step up from your other shit
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Post by -MiiLz. »

Didnt i Tell Ur Dumb Ass We Know Each Other in Person??
Dont Act Like "24/7" Were Posting From Same i.p.
i Told U When We Were, But If This What Gets U Thru The Night
The Ok Go Right Ahead.
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Post by Omega Bill »

Thanks for all the feed so far. It's appreciated.
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Post by Arvincible »

Dope, like I said u have mad personals and really exposed the nigga especially with the ip address line..the best bar was the squirrel in november opener.

10/10 on personals, and 8/10 on the overall verse

Only minus is ur complexity, u either need to add more multis, wordplay, and/or metas..

But other than that its good..

Keep it up will
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Thanks for the feed guys.
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Uppin for some more feed.
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