Damn bro I fuckin LOVED your use of imagery and wordplay. rhymes were spot on and the concept was great. 8/10

this drop is similiar in style to eminems older shit. i was trying to mimic his whole flow while adding my own shit

instrumental:http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=L89hNZVKAV4

orginal bad boy on the case came into the place
lookin to get to first base and displace my semen all over your face
a ...

Thanks alot your critiscm is appreciated. Which part would you say fell off and needs tightening up? I have trouble connecting rhymes together with a cohesive idea I guess practice makes perfect. And strangely enough I wasn't in any kind of bad situation or anything, the beat just kinda painted ...

that means these MC's bars, are catastrophes
lacking capacity like apaches
imagine these planes crashing in the black seas
I'm that much on fire, ash me

great lines here really has some niiiice imagery the rest was great i could never do that kind of multi syllabic wordplay... without a rhyming ...

I liked it alot your use of alliteration in the beginning set the flow up for the rest of the verse from the very beginning and i agree the "A beast, an animal, with savage intentions. I feast, like cannibals, and ravage intestines." line was really good and probably the best part of the verse other ...

A verse to the instrumental difficult by eminem tell me what you guys think critiscm would be appreciated! I know its a little whiney but that beat is I think made for this type of verse.


this life is so hard and my ship is sinking down to the ground without making a sound

i have failed them all ...

This is just a beginning flow tell me what you guys think! I just started rapping so any sort of criticism is appreciated.



write the words on this page dismantle the rage
feel the call of the stage
slip fall and disengage
rip the walls of the cage
falling into the mist swallowed by the abyss
is ...