nice piece, the rhyme scheme was damn near perfect. Your vocab was decent but it was more how you used the words that made the piece. I loved the opener "I meditate and let it marinate, personal terror state,
Tear my face off preparing dates, daring to stare at fate,
No scaring hate, the same way ...

I'm gripping the mic, holding my balls
hold up pause, hold the applause
thanks for teaching me how to crawl
how to appall & hold my finger to the law
dropping your sharks at the name john paul
and most of all, for never letting me fall
the charismatic static, i'm steady wreaking havoc
trying to get ...

MVGT :Tre, his multies were there, very clear, the flow worked better and i felt he had more vicious hits.

I be going harder then a fossilized erection
steady getting high, waving hi to the Jetsons
thoughts off the top while others need rogaine
blowing flames hotter then a dragon filled with propane
i'm a fucking dro-bot, go go gadget dope game
smoking on that kush but i never fucked with cocaine
not yet ...

i really dug the multi's and wordplay, keep it up man

upping

deep shit man, great multi's through the entire peice keep it up man

by no means should you respect moneymaker's fake ass lol, but i would have to give it to mitty, it seemed he had better personal punches. you were throwing kind of broad ones out there, not that some weren't good. I liked the techs message line. but i was feeling mitty' flow, multis and rhymes a ...

pure fire bro, loved it

check

-- Fri Sep 02, 2011 9:32 am --

oh, hi, oh, this pussy thought that he could whoop me
you took a gamble you gonna lose better call the bookie
Call me big blue cause you nothing but fuckeye
talk shit till ya tounge tied, cause i know you ain't a tough guy
like luke i'll show up and destroy the ...

5 bars/10 lines, anyone at all, you set it up

-- Thu Sep 01, 2011 11:00 am --

really, no one lol?

i liked the piece it, you paint a picture in every piece i've seen, good work.

it's great, i personally loved the "Silent, the sky is an easle, the paint pot had been opened,
Dashes of violet, appear as drops in the ocean," line, but canvas and blackness don't really rhyme that threw me for a second.

i enjoy the vocabulary and the picture you painted, a couple lines flowed a little clunky, but overall i like it. real heart in it.

<t>i was really trying to mix a different set of rhyme schemes with my usual style, more for contrast then anything else. just switching it up because i usually have an almost rapid multi style and wanted to expirememnt with other things. The fission line is merely a tyypo, it's supposed to be ...