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Post by - Mutual - »

this was another track i jus did to try an get practise i think it's better
i wanna see wot u think so ya know

Precise i used ya beat 1 that u posted up


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go there go to Freestyle shud be my newest one and tell me wot ya think
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bumpin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Post by ÐÛÇ£» »

it's cool to see more cats doing audio now..

Flow was eh...Lyrics were good.. you sounded hesitant.. which is normally since you're probably not new to the mic..Try and Speak up and make it flow better.. and get comfortable on the mic

beat was nice IMO

good for a first drop
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I'm at werk right now so I'll get at this later today... mutual..
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Post by - Mutual - »

thanks fo the feed Kev

uppin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

well man u needa new mic which is evident so ill only say it once.

from what i cud hear ur flow wasnt bad,lil choppy in parts but not bad.

lyrics were ok,i think u cud do a bit better if u really tried tho.

overall man it was ok,no bad really son,show more emotion tho and shout out to Donnie for makin a nice lil beat

anyways dude keep droppin and practicin!
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thanks Tram thanks fo the feed
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Post by Haz »

Chill With the Echos a Lil bit...
it MAkes it sound Crazy ,...

i'll Leave feeed in a lil..
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Post by K.O. »

yeah that reverb/accoustic is hurtin ya flow. not bad for a quick free tho. beats straight.like tramatik said ya need a new mic. (hopefully for christmas yo!) i remember i got a performance mic a few years ago i was glued to dat bitch lol.ha once you get a new mic and comfortable with mixin audio you will be on point cuz the beats are there and the lyrics are def straight.
stay up MH.
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Post by TreTru »

notbad for a freestyle..honestly sounds like your rythm's better
when you free it..the things got major stortion on my cpu speakers
but from what i hear it's alot better than the last drop...
for your writtens are you using a beat? cause it's best to
write audio stuff to tempo of the beat so it sounds on riddim..
you sounded more conf..on dis one ..keep poppin em.
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Post by - Mutual - »

aight thanks fo the feed dudes
i might have a new mic in a couple days anyhow we'll see how that works out
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Post by precise »

lol props for usin one of my beats dude

i thought this was better than the last one i heard from ya, startin to get a grasp on riding a beat, ur writings steadily getting better so keep that up, flow will get better if u keep at it, all that aside, mixin could use some work n u should try get ahold of a new mic n either buy a pop filter or make yourself one with some panty hose n a wire coathanger

keep it up man
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yeah the volume i'll have to work on but thanks fo the feed dudes
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Post by Viral »

dis was very decent for a freestyle...ur voice is deep as fuck..dats for sure...and ur mic could be WAY better...but its not as bad as people r sayin...keep it up...but write a song damnit...quit freestylin....even if its a small 1:30 track...write it up and record that...ill even mix da vocals for ya n wat not...and..stop wit da echo effects..it sounds retarded as hell...u should only use those rarely...and more smoother...those lasted way to long it was a bunch of jumbled-ness..lol..but keep doin u...i dont wanna see anymore freestyles...write a track damnit..long or short...either way....do it!...lol..
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