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Good girl gone bad .. pt 1.

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My names jackson i live up on Southmain street
where killas reside and dames eat, off sellin booty..
for a buck them whores is fucked day and night
the pussy can leave a touris stuck...chicken heads
go in the store n cluck, storing nuts in there mouths
thats what they about fuckin borin sluts...
i remember this girl jenny we went to school together..
she went out with Jamal he'd buy her jewels whenever..
till she went bi and he was like 'Coool whatever!'...
he started getting alot of paper from her like a pool of letters..
she went from his wife to a modern day hoe..
the sexy braud put on a act like a naughty goddiss play yo..
jenny started lodgin yayo, robbin paso's all from jamal..
till he caught her in a stall twisted his fist in a ball
she had no one to call pinned against a wall...
he was strikin ha, pipin ha..yellin was senseliss yall..
time from time she'd pretend ta fall like she couldnt
apprehend it all , cause this became a daily thing..
i copped a newspaper to see what headline the daily brings..
it read " today 20 a year old female was discovered-in-the-bathroom..
dead.. who would do such a thing?" it was That brother-from-the-classroom
that cat jamal , he use to treat jenny sooo great...
the same dood that determined jennys gooo date...
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Post by Lawgix »

this was interesting... more like a Distilled Concepts piece... but still it was cool... concept was off the chain... brought the story to life really... but i thought it was more like a distilled concepts kinda joint... but good shit man... can't wait for part 2

give this a 7/10
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Post by eMCee Havic »

yeah this piece here was real dark.
like sewer dark, fuckin deep story
i liked the concept for sure fuckin
abuse on women happens alot unfortunatly
good story tho i give it 7/10

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Post by The Gonz »

I liked the story. Had good multies throughout most of the piece. The structure you posted it in is dicked but I found the end of the bars anyways. Flow was pretty good. Overall, good post. Imagery was good but could have been better though. Solid verse.
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Post by ÐÛÇ£» »

Lmao @ Off selling booty
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Post by Brah-Vo »

this was grimey, nasty and graphic as hell.
Well written and a a topic that could only be executed well by a few.
And i guess you're one of them.
Great job.
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Post by TreTru »

ay yo i actually liked this post alot..had a solid concept
storyline form is underrated..i actually liked the flow..transfers were
pretty smooth..
i felt the flow was similar to that weezy song with the same title...
i might be wrong..a hott joint..IMO (yeah i said i liked a weezy song.)
anyway lots a versatility..so keep doin ya thang....
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Post by Lotus »

it wasnt a chore to read, and i enjoyed it. simple as that. props man.
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