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No More 4-17-08

Post by 3lmo »

why must you do me wrong, baby,why must you leave me lone, baby
aint fun no more, you're driving me crazy ,dont leave but if maybe,
jus remember the love that u gave me,x2


4-17 2008
I remmebr that day when I just couldnt wait
in my fate I alwasy had faith, but along the way
i saw a brighter day, and I have a lot to say
now forgive me, for my lies the sins of my love
I wouldnt blame you if I didnt make it up above
I couldnt better myself, my life it aint over
I gave my heart to the lord, a heart of a lover
in the night I sleep cold with no one to hold
those three litte words to many I have told
and Im sold out like many would say, its true
Ive been played, ive been put down, and I was a fool
I was used but never abused, never lit my fuse
they threw me away but their the ones who loose
put yourself in my shoes, and you couldnt take a step
but then again, Im sure no one's ready to fit them yet


why must you do me wrong, baby,why must you leave me lone, baby
aint fun no more, you're driving me crazy ,dont leave but if maybe,
jus remember the love that u gave me,x2

one love 2 timing lover
I played two lifes during that summer
I regret what I did, I know Im forgiving
nothing was fare, not even the love that I was getting
Im not the bad one in this scene, I promise
I respect everybody, but Im still very honest
I know where Im headin and theres no worries
I see rainy days, dark clouds and a few flurries
family comes first, dont lie to yourself
the last thing on my mind is good health
you may go against me, but theres no changing
good memories always fading,and happiness Im chasing
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Post by - Mutual - »

nice beat
the hook was quite good
the flow was choppy in places
but the lyrics were straight
nice SPM feel to it
well done i'd listen to this alot
keep'em comin
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Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Post by 3lmo »

thanks for the positives,and yeah Ima big spm fan...
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Post by Lawgix »

kay... theres so many things wrong with this man... on an audio stand point... it was horrible... no emotion... flow was off and often rushed... the effect u put on ur hook was just strange... just didn't cut it for me audio wise... on a positive note tho... lyrics were cool the hook was dope just needed emotion and spit better... lyrics too... but i do give u an a for effort... just work on delivery, emotion, flow, find ya swag and u may make a dope track

i'll give it a 3/10... the 3 is for the effort

peace
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