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*young jeezy voice* ayeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee....lol but naw im back n im'a drop sum verses and a sum bars 4 feed and rank..here they are

i gotta relieve the pain, that creeps thru my frame
what i concieve is insane, it sleeps in my brain
do u believe in fame?, it's hard'ta breathe in the rain
when all this animosity, is deep in my veins

ppl sayin he back ta spit but plz believe its a hit
he so 'e-mack-u'lit' he'll take the mack n split
the track n flip, those who are wack n shit
ill wax wit clips, cuz im at my max wit fits
so ill sit back n laugh n smoke a stack a spliffs
cuz the haters be buggin, it aint them its me
the ppl be lovin, push comes 2 shovin
and name tradin thrn fame fadin
now ur the one ta blame 4 all the insane hatin

im so deadly laced with outrages phrases
that soon become contagious, took outtah context
who's next ta try and cage this?i talk ta all ages
spreadin my knowledge from pages ta stages
tryna warn the youth, not everything iz warm n cute
so i storm the booth bein torn n brute
tryna form sum loot, and i've been sworn ta shoot
out sum sentences, tryna express how extensive
and tense this is,but from city 2 city im'a localist
known as a vocalist, and im focused
but rarer then any opal is

do i gotta create a verse and castrate a curse
and let the hate burst, and desinigrate worse
so u no im gettin fame, up on my plate first?
but i find it kinda funny now that im spittin
everybody like me, dudes given props
and girls wanna be wifey but yall can bite me
if u gotta fuckin problem then come fight me


i know its long but can yall leave feed?much apperciated 1
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Post by Mac »

Ya Style Is Similar To Mine, Practically The Same lol. Good Shit, Nice Multies, Shit Was Pretty Dope. Only Thing Is Some Syllable's Don't Match But It Flowed Smooth.. Good Shit Man, Keep It Comin Homie. Be Easy.
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

thanx homie...uppin 4 more feed 1
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

nice multis.. it all flowed pretty smoothly, im not familiar with u on the site but its good to see another skilled person here
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Post by 8th »

it was good. I remember some of your first drops here, and its clear you've elevated. Nice amounts of multis, and it flowed really good. Toward the end it feel off a little, but overall it was a solid drop. Good shit man, keep droppin.

i gotta relieve the pain, that creeps thru my frame
what i concieve is insane, it sleeps in my brain
do u believe in fame?, it's hard'ta breathe in the rain
when all this animosity, is deep in my veins

^those were my favorite lines.

oh yeah, before you drop a new thread, leave feed on another thread and put the link in ur new post.
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Post by Momeijah »

Dope Shit Lol it All Flowed The Whole Way Through, Good Multis n Shit, u Gnna Be Doin That Audio?
Peeeace LoL
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

ye i am soon Domino...but thankx 4 the feed from all of u much apperciated
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Post by drunken jesus »

good shit, you had a nice rhyme scheme in the beginning but you fell off towards the end

and you one of the dudes viral and precise helped? cause this is alot nicer than your older shit
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]

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