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My Hearts Crashin, i flow like Stars Collapsin,
More Dark wit Passion, in rappin ima Marked Assasin,
Im quick to bust fuck Lathargic Actions,
So Guard yuh Factions, im stone your only Hard in Captions,
Gotta Flow, im Droppin Hoes to the flo'(floor) like Dominoes,
Im fulla dope like Optimos, I Rock the Show like Metal bands in Rock -n- Roll,
the only way your style is cold, is when you Drop than Yo computer Froze,
witta a virus i spit, in silence you sit, ima giant tyrant im sick,
spit shit to make yuh eyelids uplift, ive scienced the grid wit violence and hits,
i look to step on piss ants, no mistakes i double take wit mishaps,
no trouble i create a with stand, this hand that holds the mic is solid in the diss stance (distance)

jussa quick lil somethin
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i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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damn no feed today huh?
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Post by complexity »

It was pretty good man.

On your sig end with a [/b]

It had a good flow to it. A few week bars. Though overall a good read. I will rate it with an 8.

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the only way your style is cold, is when you Drop than Yo computer Froze,

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More Dark wit Passion, in rappin ima Marked Assasin,
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On your sig end with a [/b]

whats that all about?
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Look at your sig...
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why do i need to end witta [/b]?
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Post by complexity »

Then it will actually be bold or if it is which it kinda looks like it might be, then just remove the first
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oh ok thanx for the info
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