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swet from the palms to the tips, what am I on this is sick
Im coughin viruses from synuses, my tears despence as drips
my blood painted the walls as if, I was shot at the width
My pain is infinite in numerals, life in-prisonment in cubacals
i hate my 9 to 5 I thrive but am deprived, so dis monotny is usual
dis world is colored Happy neon, but Im in pain alienated Im a kleagon
so as i put my debri-on dis planet I drop to da canvas n scream ima phenom
if Im not from dis earth then i study ur species
use colors n thesis put it on CD's broadcast it on T.v
smeer on sum feces and mix it wit kiwi's cuz i don wit life, believe me
ur morals are just follow da leader, so as i suicide I chop ur family wit cleavers
have limbs slidin off of ur t-shirts, make u spew vomit n seizure
as ur shaking ur last thoughts save me god or budah while I believed niether
and finaly u come to grip with reality, understand life aint bout salary
regreting wat u have u hope for calvary thinkin "please dont devour me"
but too late, i pick up a fork n show u my morols hold no bounderies

-- Sat May 16, 2009 12:35 pm --

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Re: honest opinion

Post by eMCee Havic »

this was pretty dark spit but thats how i like that shit.
nice complexity and message, stucture and flow was kinda off in some parts but overall it was a good drop. give it a 7/10

my favorite line

"ur morals are just follow da leader, so as i suicide I chop ur family wit cleavers
have limbs slidin off of ur t-shirts, make u spew vomit n seizure
"

return the favor on my post "simular to similies"
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"see you shouldnt be afraid of me..
you should be afraid of all the people in the streets
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