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the Rips and the Rhymes

Post by eMCee Havic »

just a key i wrote the "Still D.R.E" beat by dr. dre
(its better to read if you got the beat playing or know the beat)
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let me, rise.. from my feet to the sky, most rap's comerical,
i aint lie. people buy studio thugs, and think they fly..
but i,..... fucking hope they die, no lie just lyrical spits
to spiritual lifts the myrical kid, spittin with fury of fists
its clearly the shit you hear me its lit cuz your materials shit
an i never spit, inferior script, im the M.D.. descriping the
sickness, lay witness, the critics ll see im pushing limits
inhibit, with, lion like fitness, a cynic but myteriously a saint
i taint your kids when im true an frank, the tank shootin at banks
not for cash, but for a matter of fate, i scatter the state the
bastard you hate, but cant get over, just no the, truth comes out
when you run house, lynchin bankers like yo my nouce is out
i shoot than bounce, only cause them troops are out, i....
move my mouth, for the youth and found that the youth is dead
the truth is said in a cruise movement, through ya head
causin more conflict than, blue n red.. standing on a hill
saying who is next? i move n flex a complex vet, on the curve
observe my swerve when i walk on this earth.. and merge
my words with the next verse, i emerse my rhymes in my dreams
alligning my speach to woah and awe, you know its raw
if you go to hell i say go with god, evil, deceitful i will
lead you, to the end theres no defense so dont pretend
i dont come out, with the dopest blend, my focus rends
my enemies unstable, words fatal, and im willing and able
to disable your cables, so no one can come and save you
be grateful, i gave you a death, that wasnt too painfull




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Re: the Rips and the Rhymes

Post by Teflon »

Alright I'm a straight battle verse type guy so this stuff I may suck at reviewing (how idk)...Anyways, the concept was alright kind of went back and forth at times couldn't follow you always...But overall the verse was hot the multies were there plenty and flowed in very nicely...Flow was hot very easy to read...It seems some words were just used to sound good not sure if they fit properly...Metaphors were pretty nice got a decent visual at times...Overall very easy read loved the flow and multies...At times it seemed like something was missing someone else can probably explain that better...But nice drop would like to read more of your stuff...Keep elevating.
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Post by Phasewon »

this shit was ok, definitely not up to par with what I know you can do...but nonetheless, the flow was on point and this would sound ill over a beat, over all the shit was lyrically average, but still well done, keep at it...
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Post by $harky »

Yeah it was Aight...I'm still just a rooky on here but try to string the lines together more coherently. definitely did flow.
But yeah some of it just didnt and instead of spit it was more like vomit. No Offence just givin and opinion.

Keep going I'd like to see more.
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

i thought this was aight man... i spit it to the still dre beat and it hit pretty hard man... kinda like u jus keyed it straight thru the beat. over all i liked it enjoyed it flow hella hard but some of the lyrics fell off so i gotta give it 7.999/10 lol
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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Post by ScottJames »

flow was sick Mod!!

move my mouth, for the youth and found that the youth is dead
the truth is said in a cruise movement, through ya head
causin more conflict than, blue n red..


this was overall a real nice drop
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

wow nice, one of the better pieces i seen from u, couple parts fell but picked back up, didn't need the beat to enjoy this, but im sure it would've helped
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