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im the villian and the architech,
ready to build and start a sketch
chillin in the darkness vexed,
while i get my heart in check
my pen's a sword and the sharpest yet
shined and honed to carve ya chest
a hungry artist but not starvin yet
i'll choke ya throat an harm ya neck
i grow my dope an say i farm tha best
are you alarmed jus yet?
if not, my ink blots will sink thought
to a higher level and if you think not
i'll show you the essence, i drink shots
fuck a precinct cop my spays abundant
never redundant,
spitten rhymes until you plumit
people like, g hes on to to somethin
assed out but still hot when im eruptin
i'm way pass the level of consumption
drinkin crown guzzle down what sounds profound
cause if i dont ammount than the body count
will surely rise, and i'll have to bounce
and if i'm buying than i'm sure to get an ounce
nothing but profit fuck staying on topic
i could drop thiz and spit some hot shit
and call it tropic, sitting on my ant hill
with a magnifying glass people like damn hes flyin past
your ambitions of ever standin a fighting chance
i'm too ill, but writers block doesnt effect me
i can feel rich pushing a dead a ten speed
my rhymings deadly,...
but still i go off on a rhyming meadly, while climbin steady
my mind is heavy, but deeper than the mariana trench
no use for heaven, cause i seen nirvanas death
im straight twisted thought more explicit
than jeffery dalmers kitchen put on exibit
more illicit, than a hoe masturbating with crickets
and heres your ticket, this is a 1 time opportunity
cause in the next rhyme i'm damagin communities
theres no unity, so i write with lunicy
but the goon in me makes me sicker than you can speak
in school i was doomed for truencies
getting chased by the law abiding problem causers
9 misdemeanors later i raw n fightin all imposters
quick wit it my draw is lightening call tha doctor
yes im that dude, and i'm stuck in a bad mood
cause ever since childhood, i sat in jail as a mad youth
and yes thats true, but dont judge me by it
i'm modern defiance, and in my blood be riots
im a smart man, cause only the dumb be quiet
what you'll see is the truth enough to numb ya eye lids
and yes i know this should of been an audio
but only god ll kno why i dont just buy a microphone
cause if a phycos prone....
than what i'm doing is sick an tight you know
and i might jus bone this fly girl who be in my world
but a sly squirl hides pearls for the winter
i'm sinner not a beginner fuck being a winner
cause all i see is greed and hot girls getting thinner
and if you couldnt handle all of that
than i'll dismantle all my raps and you can gander all the crap
the reason why your mind cant fathom all of that
is way to deep for me to speak, i can only teach
you'll say the flow is off but it can only work for me
cause sometimes the basic is harder than pavement
and the only way i'll make it if i make spits and display it
i can just relay it it's up to you how your gon take it


this is just a colmination of my thoughts
and if you ask why i drop when i'm in a tight spot
than you'll leave some feed and find its hip hop


uppin for feed please, cause this rhyming disease
eats at me, till i almost cant breathe
and if you see how deep this flow reach
than you'll speak a lil bit and feed me


this was written to that beat mutual used in his newest song, i think its a T.I. beat but what ever

uppin
Last edited by eMCee Havic on Mon Jun 01, 2009 10:36 am, edited 1 time in total.
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nice drop...

shit killed my eyes tho....lol
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sorry about that took tha slant off and added a better color
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Post by Haz »

Yeah This Was Pretty Cool...
Begginin Was The Strongest Part Of The Piece...Towards The Middle 2...

Multi's Are Good.. Flow Is Good.. Should Try To Add a Pinch Of Something More..

I Like Ya Dedication... Keep Droppin N I Got U With Feed...
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thanks hazard, still uppin on this piece here
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Post by The Gonz »

I thought this was pretty decent. The flow was consistent, but I think it would have been more rhythmic with a tad bit longer lines. Thought I'd never say that, I'm usually criticizing how extremely long people's lines are. I enjoyed the beginning the most, you had some nice rhyme schemes and multies in there but seemed to lose track towards the middle and pretty much kept flowing just because you can, basically lyrically beating a dead horse. Little long, yes, but only because I felt that you lost interest in writing it and didn't have the hunger and energy you had at the beginning. Overall, I think it was a solid drop.
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Post by eMCee Havic »

thanks homie, yeah i was pretty much just me going off the lyrical rocker.. but thanks for trhe solid feed man..

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