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These Days...

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http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/murde ... ml#p120270


I spit the following to this beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5oijEjrLjJs It's Fabolous - Keep It Gangsta (Instrumental)


These days I stack more bread than your local bodega/
get more cheese than Jerry on the moon in a crater/
But I ain't Tom-like, I'm more Walter Cronkite/
spreadin' good news and my funeral catered/
You just a hater, I'll deal with you later/
I'd pop you now but I got some dough on the Lakers/
Slow on the chaser, but I'm fast with the paper/
I'm mask and the caper, you just broke n a raper/
hope and a dreamer, hopin' to toke in a beamer/
with an addict bitch, hopin' that she'll choke on yo weiner/
get in between her, maybe stick it in her, seed her/
have a crack child born from loathing Christina/
I Mix that green up, with gold seal hash bro/
not quite Castro, but lookin' at that cash grow/
that's what the stash for, I spit that crack raw/
not from Houston but I slug 'em like the Astros/
Snub 'em with the nickel nose, bleed 'em like a garden hose/
I harden hoes, pill 'em first, never pardon hoes/
I'm hot like fire being fed by destructive forces/
you should back up off me, and move extra cautious
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Post by MOEstradamus »

for real not bad it flowed well but had some basic and simple rhymes but i was feelin it but wat was the point you kinda went from money to bettin money to wishin for money to smokin to gettin a bitch pregnent man just wasn't feelin the inconsistent theme... but the flow was good just try and expand more good shit
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Post by Phasewon »

This shit was pretty ill, seemed to
fit well with the beat as well,

"These days I stack more bread than your local bodega/
get more cheese than Jerry on the moon in a crater/
But I ain't Tom-like, I'm more Walter Cronkite/
spreadin' good news and my funeral catered/
You just a hater, I'll deal with you later/
I'd pop you now but I got some dough on the Lakers/
Slow on the chaser, but I'm fast with the paper/
I'm mask and the caper, you just broke n a raper/"

^that whole opening was siccck, the rhyme switch ups
you demonstrated might go over alot of cats heads
who don't know how to recognize that shit, but I see
how you switched it up, which takes more structure skill
to do, props on that. stay dropping that heat homie.
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